for The Fight8/17/2004 c1 
32SilverRaiine
Do you write from personal experience? I'm wondering...'cause these all seem like they COULD happen.
32SilverRaiineDo you write from personal experience? I'm wondering...'cause these all seem like they COULD happen.
5/14/2004 c1 8the heart's pawn-shop
Perhaps I would have enjoyed it just a little more if i could relate to it a bit more easily, however i think that the feelings you conveyed would be those of the people in that situation. sorry, that right there was a little weird... i am having troubles with the English language today...
Your form is, as usual, quite sound and nice flow took place throughout. You always have the most splended endings.
-lunelapis
8the heart's pawn-shopPerhaps I would have enjoyed it just a little more if i could relate to it a bit more easily, however i think that the feelings you conveyed would be those of the people in that situation. sorry, that right there was a little weird... i am having troubles with the English language today...
Your form is, as usual, quite sound and nice flow took place throughout. You always have the most splended endings.
-lunelapis
4/18/2004 c1 Crimson Arranz
first of all: you dont have to thank me for my "kind words". i mean them. i dont obhter with criticism cuz for me, poetry is expression and it doesn't have to be pretty or to follow rules or whatever. and your poetry is awesome. that sums it up.
sry, didn't review this sooner but it stirred up nasty memories. tho teachers never saw anything.
Anyway, great poem. i know i know, lol, i always say the same things :) but it's true, so well...
first of all: you dont have to thank me for my "kind words". i mean them. i dont obhter with criticism cuz for me, poetry is expression and it doesn't have to be pretty or to follow rules or whatever. and your poetry is awesome. that sums it up.
sry, didn't review this sooner but it stirred up nasty memories. tho teachers never saw anything.
Anyway, great poem. i know i know, lol, i always say the same things :) but it's true, so well...
3/24/2004 c1 45Sammy- B
Again- it's sad. Are you getting tired of me saying that yet? Anyway, your words flow so well...you're just really good. I love how you ended it.
45Sammy- BAgain- it's sad. Are you getting tired of me saying that yet? Anyway, your words flow so well...you're just really good. I love how you ended it.
3/1/2004 c1 72dirt-is-yummy
Wow. I really like this one. I've only ever written one poem that actually rhymed and it wasn't very good. But this poem is quite good.
I never would have thought of using this as a topic unless it happened to me, and you said it didn't so, wow.
I liked the line:
you foe: suspended
your fortune awaits
I'm not really sure why, I just do.
Anyway, I can't wait until you add some more poetry to the site, I can't wait to read it.
-Em
72dirt-is-yummyWow. I really like this one. I've only ever written one poem that actually rhymed and it wasn't very good. But this poem is quite good.
I never would have thought of using this as a topic unless it happened to me, and you said it didn't so, wow.
I liked the line:
you foe: suspended
your fortune awaits
I'm not really sure why, I just do.
Anyway, I can't wait until you add some more poetry to the site, I can't wait to read it.
-Em