for Love Won't Wait4/12/2005 c11 
4Underestimated
This is a typical romance. Which isn't bad. But maybe if you didn't put everything in present tense it would be a lot easier to read. I don't know what it is but some of the parts don't go well together. I hope you write more, because practice helps a lot. Otherwise I enjoyed reading the story!
4UnderestimatedThis is a typical romance. Which isn't bad. But maybe if you didn't put everything in present tense it would be a lot easier to read. I don't know what it is but some of the parts don't go well together. I hope you write more, because practice helps a lot. Otherwise I enjoyed reading the story!
1/30/2005 c11 2Stephixy Bell
I love this story so much. I can't help but smile when I read it. Every character is so realateable, and realistic. You don't have anything too dramatic going on which makes the story more beliveable. I'm glad you finaly updated. I can't wait for the next chapter so hurry!
2Stephixy BellI love this story so much. I can't help but smile when I read it. Every character is so realateable, and realistic. You don't have anything too dramatic going on which makes the story more beliveable. I'm glad you finaly updated. I can't wait for the next chapter so hurry!
1/26/2005 c11 3Irishdarling
Awesome story! I couldn't stop reading! Keep up the good writing! And update soon!
3IrishdarlingAwesome story! I couldn't stop reading! Keep up the good writing! And update soon!
1/26/2005 c11 1brokenheartsbeat
of course i stuck around! haha. awesome chapter. they are so cute...thats so sad about her dad beeing dead. *sniff* and his dad not liking him *sniff*...that was funny though with crystal and brian interrupting them haha. thats happened to me before...its very embarassing...haha. so glad you updated. keep up the good work!
1brokenheartsbeatof course i stuck around! haha. awesome chapter. they are so cute...thats so sad about her dad beeing dead. *sniff* and his dad not liking him *sniff*...that was funny though with crystal and brian interrupting them haha. thats happened to me before...its very embarassing...haha. so glad you updated. keep up the good work!
11/9/2004 c10 brokenheartsbeat
hey! finally you updated! good chapter! i can't wait for another update
hey! finally you updated! good chapter! i can't wait for another update
11/9/2004 c10 swtazndestiney
It's a good story, but I would like to know Matt POV. As for Katie, she seems a little to straight forward on her action (make her look desperate, but I still enjoy reading it.
It's a good story, but I would like to know Matt POV. As for Katie, she seems a little to straight forward on her action (make her look desperate, but I still enjoy reading it.
11/9/2004 c10 13Klanfer
Hey.. Great storyline.
But you should go through it and edit and redo some phrases.
You change tense way too much. Just stick to past or present in it.
Other than that it's fabbo:D
xoxox
ta'z luv.
Oh and sometimes when you explain certain things it sounds awkward becuase it's straight out. Maybe if you could put something of it into her thoughts or descriptions instead.
Just a suggestion:D
Oh and ps... PLEASE check out my story Rebel Army or Dalaya McAya:D
13KlanferHey.. Great storyline.
But you should go through it and edit and redo some phrases.
You change tense way too much. Just stick to past or present in it.
Other than that it's fabbo:D
xoxox
ta'z luv.
Oh and sometimes when you explain certain things it sounds awkward becuase it's straight out. Maybe if you could put something of it into her thoughts or descriptions instead.
Just a suggestion:D
Oh and ps... PLEASE check out my story Rebel Army or Dalaya McAya:D
10/23/2004 c9 2miss Jay
please update! AND PLEASE GIVE ME SOMETHING FROM MATT'S POV! PLEASE! this is really good~! Chapters could be longer, but htis is good! =D
2miss Jayplease update! AND PLEASE GIVE ME SOMETHING FROM MATT'S POV! PLEASE! this is really good~! Chapters could be longer, but htis is good! =D
10/10/2004 c9 onetwothree123
aw, how cute! i'm dying to know what's gonna happen next! UPDATE AS SOON AS U CAN! =D
aw, how cute! i'm dying to know what's gonna happen next! UPDATE AS SOON AS U CAN! =D
8/17/2004 c9 10ibjuicen
Aw...common! I finally get to read another good chapter of this story and your gone for two weeks!
Well, I hope you have the next chapter planned out so I can read it when I get back. :D
Laters! ^_^
10ibjuicenAw...common! I finally get to read another good chapter of this story and your gone for two weeks!
Well, I hope you have the next chapter planned out so I can read it when I get back. :D
Laters! ^_^
8/17/2004 c9 1Mizuko-1103
Hi...! Your story is really, really,really, ROMANTIC! And yet, I have a few comments: you use too many same words in each paragraphs or in different but close paragraph. Example:
"Well... mem Brian... and... Matt."
"Don't worry. I'll make sure he behave himself," Brian said quickly when he saw how hesitant she looked.
"Well, alright, that sounds found."
See? You should...just... not use 'well' again. NO HARD FEELINGS. Your story is great, though. Ja!
1Mizuko-1103Hi...! Your story is really, really,really, ROMANTIC! And yet, I have a few comments: you use too many same words in each paragraphs or in different but close paragraph. Example:
"Well... mem Brian... and... Matt."
"Don't worry. I'll make sure he behave himself," Brian said quickly when he saw how hesitant she looked.
"Well, alright, that sounds found."
See? You should...just... not use 'well' again. NO HARD FEELINGS. Your story is great, though. Ja!
8/17/2004 c9 1brokenheartsbeat
OMG! matt and katie SO HAVE to HOOK UP! AH! this is so good...i've been waiting so long for an update! but i'll be in cali for almost 2 weeks and wont be able to read it anyway even if you did update...so it's all good as long as you update as soon as you get back!
1brokenheartsbeatOMG! matt and katie SO HAVE to HOOK UP! AH! this is so good...i've been waiting so long for an update! but i'll be in cali for almost 2 weeks and wont be able to read it anyway even if you did update...so it's all good as long as you update as soon as you get back!
7/25/2004 c8 16kaika switched
I love Katie. She's such an original, yet typical character. Typical as in she's easy to relate to (so don't take that the wrong way!). I'm really enjoying this story so far. Keep writing!
16kaika switchedI love Katie. She's such an original, yet typical character. Typical as in she's easy to relate to (so don't take that the wrong way!). I'm really enjoying this story so far. Keep writing!