
3/3 c29 Anon
I was here!
Great read! Hope author is doing well in the future :)
I was here!
Great read! Hope author is doing well in the future :)
4/18/2015 c29 moose
i loved it, the ending was a it abrupt but i'm very glad you didn't do the adoption/suicide thing
i loved it, the ending was a it abrupt but i'm very glad you didn't do the adoption/suicide thing
10/27/2014 c29
3TheClosetWriter16
This is very different from the things I usually read but I was intrigued. I actually quite enjoyed reading it haha.

This is very different from the things I usually read but I was intrigued. I actually quite enjoyed reading it haha.
9/22/2014 c29 briseis26
The story was amazing and well written, the ending was very good...what more can i say? Yay Jen&Matt
The story was amazing and well written, the ending was very good...what more can i say? Yay Jen&Matt
5/11/2014 c29 Sithlord223
one of my fave stories of all time, it was this story that made me create an acc on here to review, love it very much wish there were more stories on this topic, im not saying its good or bad but who are we to fight what our heart wants?
one of my fave stories of all time, it was this story that made me create an acc on here to review, love it very much wish there were more stories on this topic, im not saying its good or bad but who are we to fight what our heart wants?
3/20/2014 c28 Guest
I... No. I'm sorry, I just... No.
I... No. I'm sorry, I just... No.
1/30/2014 c29 hiddenshadowsoul1
I really liked your story. I read the whole thing in about an hour. I was hooked!
I really liked your story. I read the whole thing in about an hour. I was hooked!
6/25/2013 c29 Mark-Alford
That was a GREAT story. I just loved it. I rate it a 9. I also love how you added the quotes and stuff. That's just genius.
That was a GREAT story. I just loved it. I rate it a 9. I also love how you added the quotes and stuff. That's just genius.
5/9/2013 c8 Guest
Sucked in as always with the guys talkin about doin each other, what kind of crowd? I often have flashbacks of a group of beings at Hollywood & Vine, although the whips and chains held possibilities and probabilities of future un-limitation.
Sucked in as always with the guys talkin about doin each other, what kind of crowd? I often have flashbacks of a group of beings at Hollywood & Vine, although the whips and chains held possibilities and probabilities of future un-limitation.
5/8/2013 c29
1Elizabeth K
Okay I know you wrote this like almost 10 years ago, so your writing has changed dramatically since then, but I still have things I want to get off my chest about this ending. I've been reading this story all day up until around 2:45 in the morning and I honestly didn't like the ending one bit. I feet like it is a complete cop out or an easy escape.
Here, you have this huge obstacle between Matt and Jen (that I was quite surprised would happen) and they just decide to run away? I can't. They are finally dealing with conflicts that don't just involve their feelings, but how they're decisions effect the people around them. Also it would've been interesting to hear the opinion of the parents and maybe a little altercation between Matt and Josh. I don't know, but running away just seems like a punk move.
Now that I have vented, I thoroughly enjoyed your story. It was a light, and easy read. Andrea is a bit extra at times, but I like how she still stuck by Jen's side. She definitely adds some depth and spiciness to the story with her actions. The incest didn't even bother me. I like reading about taboo stuff like that. I'll definitely be checking out your other material.
Please don't hate me for my review lol. Again, I do understand it's been a long time since you've published this story, I'm just a little upset because I've invested so much time into it just to have it end so abruptly with loose ends, but I'm better now. I'll definitely be checking out some of your other stories so I hope you continue writing :)

Okay I know you wrote this like almost 10 years ago, so your writing has changed dramatically since then, but I still have things I want to get off my chest about this ending. I've been reading this story all day up until around 2:45 in the morning and I honestly didn't like the ending one bit. I feet like it is a complete cop out or an easy escape.
Here, you have this huge obstacle between Matt and Jen (that I was quite surprised would happen) and they just decide to run away? I can't. They are finally dealing with conflicts that don't just involve their feelings, but how they're decisions effect the people around them. Also it would've been interesting to hear the opinion of the parents and maybe a little altercation between Matt and Josh. I don't know, but running away just seems like a punk move.
Now that I have vented, I thoroughly enjoyed your story. It was a light, and easy read. Andrea is a bit extra at times, but I like how she still stuck by Jen's side. She definitely adds some depth and spiciness to the story with her actions. The incest didn't even bother me. I like reading about taboo stuff like that. I'll definitely be checking out your other material.
Please don't hate me for my review lol. Again, I do understand it's been a long time since you've published this story, I'm just a little upset because I've invested so much time into it just to have it end so abruptly with loose ends, but I'm better now. I'll definitely be checking out some of your other stories so I hope you continue writing :)
3/21/2013 c8 Pink Bead Girl
Beautifully done. You stopped them at just the right point I think. I would not ever consider something like this being ok in real life but here we are in Fiction Land and anything you want can happen without fear or favour. I think your take on this is very intriguing and I like the way you have Matt still having his thinking-cap on and decide that something this momentous should be thought through a bit further and not turned into something sordid. I like the way you write, you take the reader out of the reality around them and into a place where anything can happen.
Beautifully done. You stopped them at just the right point I think. I would not ever consider something like this being ok in real life but here we are in Fiction Land and anything you want can happen without fear or favour. I think your take on this is very intriguing and I like the way you have Matt still having his thinking-cap on and decide that something this momentous should be thought through a bit further and not turned into something sordid. I like the way you write, you take the reader out of the reality around them and into a place where anything can happen.
3/21/2013 c1 Pink Bead Girl
A great start. I am interested already to see what will happen next. I like your loose informal style of dialogue, you do it well.
A great start. I am interested already to see what will happen next. I like your loose informal style of dialogue, you do it well.
3/11/2013 c29 Jenny
i really like that story i read this a long time ago and now i read all over again
just tell me how did you get that idea of the story ? its just a curiosity
thank you
i really like that story i read this a long time ago and now i read all over again
just tell me how did you get that idea of the story ? its just a curiosity
thank you
2/19/2013 c29 Tony J. Hall
First off let me start by saying (and I'm sure somebody is going to PM me about this) that I really don't see incest as a horrible thing. It's illegal in quite a few states in the US, sure. It's frowned upon in modern society to the point of being scarcely spoken of except to ridicule it. To be sure, I do not nor have I ever fantasized about or been with my sister (or any other family members) in that way, but I just don't agree with the stigma surrounding the subject.
I think, if the feeling of true love is there and it's mutual, blood relation shouldn't matter. And as such, I really enjoyed this story. The drama between Matt and Jen before the climax was trying for me to read personally, but necessary to set the overall feel of their relationship and the story as a whole. I was rooting for them both to come around and end up together on a more permanent basis since the prologue and I'm quite satisfied how things turned out, the story was realistic and well-grounded and you didn't pull out any cliché fairy-tale endings to explain away and resolve all the drama, like one of them being adopted or everyone suddenly just gritting their teeth and accepting the fact that Matt and Jen love each other and are content to let them be and being happy for their happiness.
Honestly, bravo. I'd be all over a sequel if one came about.
First off let me start by saying (and I'm sure somebody is going to PM me about this) that I really don't see incest as a horrible thing. It's illegal in quite a few states in the US, sure. It's frowned upon in modern society to the point of being scarcely spoken of except to ridicule it. To be sure, I do not nor have I ever fantasized about or been with my sister (or any other family members) in that way, but I just don't agree with the stigma surrounding the subject.
I think, if the feeling of true love is there and it's mutual, blood relation shouldn't matter. And as such, I really enjoyed this story. The drama between Matt and Jen before the climax was trying for me to read personally, but necessary to set the overall feel of their relationship and the story as a whole. I was rooting for them both to come around and end up together on a more permanent basis since the prologue and I'm quite satisfied how things turned out, the story was realistic and well-grounded and you didn't pull out any cliché fairy-tale endings to explain away and resolve all the drama, like one of them being adopted or everyone suddenly just gritting their teeth and accepting the fact that Matt and Jen love each other and are content to let them be and being happy for their happiness.
Honestly, bravo. I'd be all over a sequel if one came about.