for Stand Back, Daughter8/1/2004 c4 Infinity Plus One
I am thinking that the last chapter will be a twist? So far, so good. I am visualising a darkened room with a scared child.
I am thinking that the last chapter will be a twist? So far, so good. I am visualising a darkened room with a scared child.
8/1/2004 c1 Infinity Plus One
Haiku story? So that is the reason for the few words. This is a bright beginning, calming in a way.
Haiku story? So that is the reason for the few words. This is a bright beginning, calming in a way.
6/2/2004 c4 
80Plato's Optic Runaway
This one is most definitely my favourite of the bunch; its elegance overthrows the rest in expertise, save perhaps the first. The antediluvian feel to this with hints at classicism are wonderful; it reminds me of a mother and daughter as you describe as intensely as the first poem in this collection.
80Plato's Optic RunawayThis one is most definitely my favourite of the bunch; its elegance overthrows the rest in expertise, save perhaps the first. The antediluvian feel to this with hints at classicism are wonderful; it reminds me of a mother and daughter as you describe as intensely as the first poem in this collection.
6/2/2004 c2 Plato's Optic Runaway
It reminds me of my sister as a child; those plastic, superficial dolls with the flourescent pink cradle. Terribly reminiscent.
It reminds me of my sister as a child; those plastic, superficial dolls with the flourescent pink cradle. Terribly reminiscent.
5/24/2004 c5 55DueTuesday
i severly love your haikus. doors and keychains is rockin'. Youve seriously inspired me to start writting my haikus. check them out i think i have two up there so far but im going to be adding more soon.
55DueTuesdayi severly love your haikus. doors and keychains is rockin'. Youve seriously inspired me to start writting my haikus. check them out i think i have two up there so far but im going to be adding more soon.
4/21/2004 c1 138Lina Inverse
I love the imagery... But just as a tiny little nitpick... it's spelled "artifact"
138Lina InverseI love the imagery... But just as a tiny little nitpick... it's spelled "artifact"
3/17/2004 c2 123breakdown in the waiting room
I used to have those diaries, too. One time, I had this little one my mother gave me- one of my cousins read it and then ripped it up.
She's a bitch.
It took me a few times re-reading this before I fully understood the message, but the more I read a piece, the more my appreciation for it grows.
-Jessica
123breakdown in the waiting roomI used to have those diaries, too. One time, I had this little one my mother gave me- one of my cousins read it and then ripped it up.
She's a bitch.
It took me a few times re-reading this before I fully understood the message, but the more I read a piece, the more my appreciation for it grows.
-Jessica
3/17/2004 c1 breakdown in the waiting room
Hm. . .I don't quite get this one, though I love the whole idea of an autobiography in haiku. Like photographs. And the title - "Stand Back, Daughter" is fantastic.
-Jessica
Hm. . .I don't quite get this one, though I love the whole idea of an autobiography in haiku. Like photographs. And the title - "Stand Back, Daughter" is fantastic.
-Jessica
3/17/2004 c4 breakdown in the waiting room
The tone of the piece is so sad. . .when I was a kid I had those same books. And no bedtime stories.
-Jessica
The tone of the piece is so sad. . .when I was a kid I had those same books. And no bedtime stories.
-Jessica
3/17/2004 c5 breakdown in the waiting room
Sounds like my house.
The words all flow together perfectly for this frightening, heart-breaking image.
-Jessica
Sounds like my house.
The words all flow together perfectly for this frightening, heart-breaking image.
-Jessica
3/15/2004 c3 138Lina Inverse
I really like this one... It's so... deep... How do you carefully create something, then treat it like a slave? It's like if a parent gave birth to a child, and carefully raised her into a young woman, then restricted her into just doing chores/working for the family business.
138Lina InverseI really like this one... It's so... deep... How do you carefully create something, then treat it like a slave? It's like if a parent gave birth to a child, and carefully raised her into a young woman, then restricted her into just doing chores/working for the family business.