for Alone3/7/2004 c1 Lauren334
This is so good Kourtney! So sad and touching! I loved it! You have a knack (hehe funny word) for poetry and I seem to love every poem you write!
This is so good Kourtney! So sad and touching! I loved it! You have a knack (hehe funny word) for poetry and I seem to love every poem you write!
3/6/2004 c1 
13J-fReAK
I think you've got a type-o for starters: "And the screaming together as the car begin to be crushed-should be began to be crushed. This is overall a good read, except, in my opinion, the ending. Possibly, "Why didn't you take me too?"
Instead you leave me here, to face this cold world... alone.
And that's just a possiblity, more or less, a suggestion. That last question just doesn't fit with the rest I don't think. Good job anyway.
J-fReAK
P.S. Check out My Autobiography of Them
13J-fReAKI think you've got a type-o for starters: "And the screaming together as the car begin to be crushed-should be began to be crushed. This is overall a good read, except, in my opinion, the ending. Possibly, "Why didn't you take me too?"
Instead you leave me here, to face this cold world... alone.
And that's just a possiblity, more or less, a suggestion. That last question just doesn't fit with the rest I don't think. Good job anyway.
J-fReAK
P.S. Check out My Autobiography of Them