for The Girls1/3/2007 c1 
93Writingsfrommyheart
Its good. I like the start of it. It will ne an interesting story. I can't help thinking some parts are weak, like with Fiona. A good thearpist wouldn't come out ever and say tell me everything about it. Thats not realistic. And be more descriptive!
Other than that its really taking off. Keep working.
93WritingsfrommyheartIts good. I like the start of it. It will ne an interesting story. I can't help thinking some parts are weak, like with Fiona. A good thearpist wouldn't come out ever and say tell me everything about it. Thats not realistic. And be more descriptive!
Other than that its really taking off. Keep working.
3/16/2004 c1 27Tears on the Sidewalk
Oh yes I like this one. yes I do... Update soon!
Peace out-
Somewhere
27Tears on the SidewalkOh yes I like this one. yes I do... Update soon!
Peace out-
Somewhere
3/6/2004 c1 14Peregrine Psyche
I like it... don't think I've every seen a story like this. Nice work.
14Peregrine PsycheI like it... don't think I've every seen a story like this. Nice work.
3/6/2004 c1 4Amethyst Fire Knight
Good plot start. You should keep writing. Also when you started on Kerrie's session, you didn't mention what was wrong with her, and i didn't remember from the beginning. It might help if you hinted at each girl's problems until a ilttle further in the story, just so we can keep them straight. Other than that, great job! I'd be glad to read more!
~*Amethyst Fire Knight*~
4Amethyst Fire KnightGood plot start. You should keep writing. Also when you started on Kerrie's session, you didn't mention what was wrong with her, and i didn't remember from the beginning. It might help if you hinted at each girl's problems until a ilttle further in the story, just so we can keep them straight. Other than that, great job! I'd be glad to read more!
~*Amethyst Fire Knight*~