for Fickle Inspiration11/2/2004 c1 UnsungbutWritten
Awesome poem. I totally relate, I know exactly how you feel. Sometimes I just want to make problems so I could feel enough to write. I especially like the lines about the moonbeams and the sun which kills poetry. Very lyrical, and well said. But I think you lose a bit of your momentum towards the end, with the last couple of lines.
Awesome poem. I totally relate, I know exactly how you feel. Sometimes I just want to make problems so I could feel enough to write. I especially like the lines about the moonbeams and the sun which kills poetry. Very lyrical, and well said. But I think you lose a bit of your momentum towards the end, with the last couple of lines.
4/11/2004 c1 
48Silent Laughter
Ah! Perfect. You are the best at doing this~ getting ideas down and having them make sense without overly using stupid metaphors and similies like I tend to do. ^^ perfect! perfect perfect perfect! the vocabulary was perfect, the idea perfect... well, maybe I overused perfect a bit... but still!
~*~SL~*~
48Silent LaughterAh! Perfect. You are the best at doing this~ getting ideas down and having them make sense without overly using stupid metaphors and similies like I tend to do. ^^ perfect! perfect perfect perfect! the vocabulary was perfect, the idea perfect... well, maybe I overused perfect a bit... but still!
~*~SL~*~
3/24/2004 c1 21dancingwiththedead
Ha, I read your bio and was expecting a poem I would think suicidal. But I know exactly what your talking about and it has nothing to do with suicide what so ever. My best work is done at 3 in the morning when I look like shit. I liked the reason for this poem alot. It was well said. ^_^
21dancingwiththedeadHa, I read your bio and was expecting a poem I would think suicidal. But I know exactly what your talking about and it has nothing to do with suicide what so ever. My best work is done at 3 in the morning when I look like shit. I liked the reason for this poem alot. It was well said. ^_^
3/20/2004 c1 2flor-gurl
Brilliant! Omg! I know just what you mean! I feel that way all the time! Lovely, you seem to have captured the feeling perfectly...thank you...
~*~flor~*~
2flor-gurlBrilliant! Omg! I know just what you mean! I feel that way all the time! Lovely, you seem to have captured the feeling perfectly...thank you...
~*~flor~*~
3/17/2004 c1 19Drama-Queen-Me
Amazing poem. I like it. It does sound a little suisidal, but great, otherwise.
Lisa:p
19Drama-Queen-MeAmazing poem. I like it. It does sound a little suisidal, but great, otherwise.
Lisa:p
3/15/2004 c1 6choirchick123
WOW. THAT'S POWERFUL. sorry. had it on Caps. anywayz. I feel the same sometimes... Like the world is gonna blow you over if you don't do something? Thanks for reviewing mine. I just wrote it this morning. My ex-boyfriend recently asked me back out and he really hurt me. I was confused.anywayz sorry for the life run-down. Great poem!
6choirchick123WOW. THAT'S POWERFUL. sorry. had it on Caps. anywayz. I feel the same sometimes... Like the world is gonna blow you over if you don't do something? Thanks for reviewing mine. I just wrote it this morning. My ex-boyfriend recently asked me back out and he really hurt me. I was confused.anywayz sorry for the life run-down. Great poem!
3/14/2004 c1 144Infinite Smiles
It ddn't strike me as suicidal at all. ( read your profile ) I sometimes feel the same way. When you are happy...there is no inspiration. The most powerful emotions are apin and anguish. Plus, you do not need to get happiness "out", but pain needs to be expressed. i love the descriptions in the poem. Well done.
144Infinite SmilesIt ddn't strike me as suicidal at all. ( read your profile ) I sometimes feel the same way. When you are happy...there is no inspiration. The most powerful emotions are apin and anguish. Plus, you do not need to get happiness "out", but pain needs to be expressed. i love the descriptions in the poem. Well done.
3/7/2004 c1 19white-water-siren
Again...wow. I'm stunned, you have a talent and you really need to follow with it... your stuff is incredible.
19white-water-sirenAgain...wow. I'm stunned, you have a talent and you really need to follow with it... your stuff is incredible.
3/6/2004 c1 10k+LaTierraSutil
you know... this really speaks to me... it's deep. it's excellent. (applause.)
10k+LaTierraSutilyou know... this really speaks to me... it's deep. it's excellent. (applause.)
3/6/2004 c1 74LordK
Very, very, very, VERY good! That is incredible... very good question you've asked. Interesting. The images and metaphors are very powerful, and really intriguing. Great stuff. ABSOLUTELY INCREDIBLE! Wow... I loved it. You are fabulous at poetry. I liked the "Contented side of me" line. Great. Wow, wow, wow, wow, wow. Great
74LordKVery, very, very, VERY good! That is incredible... very good question you've asked. Interesting. The images and metaphors are very powerful, and really intriguing. Great stuff. ABSOLUTELY INCREDIBLE! Wow... I loved it. You are fabulous at poetry. I liked the "Contented side of me" line. Great. Wow, wow, wow, wow, wow. Great
3/6/2004 c1 Dark Swordmaster
I like it. Now, while I don't get it in full, I know you write for yourself and I think that's a good thing. Overall I thought this was a very interesting piece, if not a tad bit confusing (to me at least). Tres bien!
I like it. Now, while I don't get it in full, I know you write for yourself and I think that's a good thing. Overall I thought this was a very interesting piece, if not a tad bit confusing (to me at least). Tres bien!
3/6/2004 c1 17Akera
Wow, that is touching.. Don't ever give up on life though! You don't need to give up, not one bit. You are on this planet for some type of reason, and you should go on with the reason. Even though life is hard, it is not all that hard in the end. You think, at this point in time, that you can just die because something that happened, but you will pull thru it. I promise you will. I love you (even though I don't know you that well)! Hehe, and don't forget that!
17AkeraWow, that is touching.. Don't ever give up on life though! You don't need to give up, not one bit. You are on this planet for some type of reason, and you should go on with the reason. Even though life is hard, it is not all that hard in the end. You think, at this point in time, that you can just die because something that happened, but you will pull thru it. I promise you will. I love you (even though I don't know you that well)! Hehe, and don't forget that!