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6/26/2005 c1 7Silver Sorrow
Honestly? I can't relate to save my life - loved it anyways. Especially the repitition and the line about stardust. And fragments. The one thing that sounded a bit awkward was "but you are cold to the core." But maybe that's just me. And I really liked the last line. (Last lines always seem to be the best. Someone should make a book of them.)
3/12/2004 c1 32Birdaloo
come home... i dont want you to be broken any more. something so beautiful should never be shattered the way you have been. never.
~Birdy
3/12/2004 c1 16Shinn
wow...I can relate so deeply to this,it's almost creepy! I really like the way you've used the words around. very picturesque. good job :)
3/11/2004 c1 31Modern Poet
That was very beautiful! I definitly needed to hear this! I've been thinking that I am the broken girl whole week! Thanks for writing this-I'm putting it in my faves.
3/11/2004 c1 144Infinite Smiles
They rythm is almost like that of a nursery rhyme...which I like. It's a simple rythm, in a sad poem, which is obviously not a nursery rhyme. I like hte repetition as well. Well done.

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