
7/12/2004 c1
40singingspeechless
i loved the intro and ending for this poem..it really pulled it all together. great!

i loved the intro and ending for this poem..it really pulled it all together. great!
7/8/2004 c1
1dancing-cheeka
Very vivid poem, I admire your descriptions and repition. I can also recall an experience like this...Great poem!

Very vivid poem, I admire your descriptions and repition. I can also recall an experience like this...Great poem!
4/15/2004 c1
27Glennesque
Very emotional and deep, i like it. I feel the same way now i've started college. That's life though.

Very emotional and deep, i like it. I feel the same way now i've started college. That's life though.
4/10/2004 c1
7Emma Noel
Oh, wow I like this. It's very sad. Yes, very very sad indeed. Makes me want to cry. What I really like is that I can actually understand this poem. It's not abstract...I can never understand that abstract stuff. lol. Anyway, good job!

Oh, wow I like this. It's very sad. Yes, very very sad indeed. Makes me want to cry. What I really like is that I can actually understand this poem. It's not abstract...I can never understand that abstract stuff. lol. Anyway, good job!
3/28/2004 c1
7TigHan
i remember this poem, i think i was there when you wrote it or something. i think you should make it a teensy bit longer. its really good.

i remember this poem, i think i was there when you wrote it or something. i think you should make it a teensy bit longer. its really good.
3/24/2004 c1
19Alasse Tiwele
this was really good! there is just one suggestion i have...make a break between "Fitst of all" and "What happened?" and if you want to could establish the relationship a bit more...anyway just suggestions
Happy Writing
~Alasse

this was really good! there is just one suggestion i have...make a break between "Fitst of all" and "What happened?" and if you want to could establish the relationship a bit more...anyway just suggestions
Happy Writing
~Alasse
3/23/2004 c1 heavenleigh5
Jesus. i can definitely relate to this. it happened to me. I love the way it flows and how it changed from first, to last *wipes away a tear* It's really close to home, anyway, good job.
THanks for reading my story. I'm posting chapter 11 sometime in the near future, so look out for it :D
HeavenLeigh xx
Jesus. i can definitely relate to this. it happened to me. I love the way it flows and how it changed from first, to last *wipes away a tear* It's really close to home, anyway, good job.
THanks for reading my story. I'm posting chapter 11 sometime in the near future, so look out for it :D
HeavenLeigh xx