for Morningstar Old Version11/25/2007 c2 
2Sheila Ibre
G'morning. (or evening... um, depending on where you are I suppose)
So you emailed me, and hence here we are; three years later. There was no way I could remember what the story was previously like but apparently I liked the 'fancy names' and another reviewer though it was 'cute'. (I cringed at my review; so young... ah bugger, never mind)
I don't hang around FP anymore (it's been three years =P) but I dropped by this morning to give your revamp a go. It's still an interesting prologue because I simply can't resist plots with swearing Angels. The names Raphael, Michael and Gabe go fittingly well with the story. But there isn't much I can comment on other than what I'm starting to expect; street-wise, glib, suave protagonist named Gabe (I think? aih. I'm not awake yet it seems)
Commenting on the whole; it's pretty good. Only the beginning though, and writing any length of story can be a great challenge. I would most definitely love to see this story play out till the end. So from my more japanese roots, please let me say, 'Gambatte kudasai!' Please work hard ^^ and keep writing.
Patiently waiting (let's not make it another three years?)
Sheila.
2Sheila IbreG'morning. (or evening... um, depending on where you are I suppose)
So you emailed me, and hence here we are; three years later. There was no way I could remember what the story was previously like but apparently I liked the 'fancy names' and another reviewer though it was 'cute'. (I cringed at my review; so young... ah bugger, never mind)
I don't hang around FP anymore (it's been three years =P) but I dropped by this morning to give your revamp a go. It's still an interesting prologue because I simply can't resist plots with swearing Angels. The names Raphael, Michael and Gabe go fittingly well with the story. But there isn't much I can comment on other than what I'm starting to expect; street-wise, glib, suave protagonist named Gabe (I think? aih. I'm not awake yet it seems)
Commenting on the whole; it's pretty good. Only the beginning though, and writing any length of story can be a great challenge. I would most definitely love to see this story play out till the end. So from my more japanese roots, please let me say, 'Gambatte kudasai!' Please work hard ^^ and keep writing.
Patiently waiting (let's not make it another three years?)
Sheila.
8/10/2004 c1 2ZarahK
This is SO hilarious! It's very original!
It's around 2 in the morning and I've just laughed so loud I thought I'd wake the entire block...well, thanks God (or Satan?) :S no one seemed to hear me...*starts with another hysterical laugh-attack*
2ZarahKThis is SO hilarious! It's very original!
It's around 2 in the morning and I've just laughed so loud I thought I'd wake the entire block...well, thanks God (or Satan?) :S no one seemed to hear me...*starts with another hysterical laugh-attack*
5/24/2004 c1 6venefican
I can finally review! I don't have much to say cause I've already told you my opinion
6veneficanI can finally review! I don't have much to say cause I've already told you my opinion
4/11/2004 c1 11xbillyxtalentx
honestly, I didn't read this story. but I felt the urge to comment.
I'm in a band called morningstar. I found that briefly amusing.
11xbillyxtalentxhonestly, I didn't read this story. but I felt the urge to comment.
I'm in a band called morningstar. I found that briefly amusing.
3/20/2004 c1 12Bleachedclouds
I love my fancy names :b
I am working on chapter two version 7.5 (This story was started yonks ago on holiday last summer) at da mo and inspiration allowing there should be more soon!
And this sounds SO bigheaded.. But Whos Catherine Webb? I'm awful at author names so I'd probably know her from book titles but still -_-
12BleachedcloudsI love my fancy names :b
I am working on chapter two version 7.5 (This story was started yonks ago on holiday last summer) at da mo and inspiration allowing there should be more soon!
And this sounds SO bigheaded.. But Whos Catherine Webb? I'm awful at author names so I'd probably know her from book titles but still -_-
3/20/2004 c1 2Sheila Ibre
Well, What happenes?
Very interesting...Fanciest names I've ever seen. I love the way you made everything sound casual in the storytelling. You oculd be the next Catherine Webb (I don't know if I spelt her name correctly. I've got spelling issues.)
Keep going!
2Sheila IbreWell, What happenes?
Very interesting...Fanciest names I've ever seen. I love the way you made everything sound casual in the storytelling. You oculd be the next Catherine Webb (I don't know if I spelt her name correctly. I've got spelling issues.)
Keep going!
3/17/2004 c1 SociallyUnacceptable
Hey, tis Lian
Wow, very good :-D
Only critism is that your personality shows through your writing a little, not that it's a bad thing, most people wouldn't notice it, I just do cause i'm a cow. Not that you got a bad personality, I just pick things out like that, it irratates me slightly.
Hey, tis Lian
Wow, very good :-D
Only critism is that your personality shows through your writing a little, not that it's a bad thing, most people wouldn't notice it, I just do cause i'm a cow. Not that you got a bad personality, I just pick things out like that, it irratates me slightly.