for Out of Control3/28/2004 c1 
21princess max
Damn good. Er constructive criticism? No thanks, I'll settle for a cheesy little line; 'keep writing'.
21princess maxDamn good. Er constructive criticism? No thanks, I'll settle for a cheesy little line; 'keep writing'.
3/18/2004 c1 5BloodFairy
I liked the story overall, but for the ending. I mean, when I read it, it felt like you finished your fic just because you just got tired of writing. At least, that was my impression. Anyway, you did a good work.
Oh, and this sentence doesn't make sense for me: "I'm sure if she knew I was dealing there".
5BloodFairyI liked the story overall, but for the ending. I mean, when I read it, it felt like you finished your fic just because you just got tired of writing. At least, that was my impression. Anyway, you did a good work.
Oh, and this sentence doesn't make sense for me: "I'm sure if she knew I was dealing there".