for Bad Wife8/8/2005 c1 
5luxian
hmm, i like the way you turned things round. You put the characters feelings across very well too. keep writing!
5luxianhmm, i like the way you turned things round. You put the characters feelings across very well too. keep writing!
8/7/2004 c1 1Katsuhiro
Interesting inversion, though I still think it would have immersed the reader more were you to take an immediate focus on their relationship, rather than hindsight. SHOW us when she's being abusive, and the the protagonist's plight would be rendered all the more affecting.
Can't fault the idea though.
1KatsuhiroInteresting inversion, though I still think it would have immersed the reader more were you to take an immediate focus on their relationship, rather than hindsight. SHOW us when she's being abusive, and the the protagonist's plight would be rendered all the more affecting.
Can't fault the idea though.
4/6/2004 c1 5Aake Redfield
I like this. Funny and well-written piece of work. I think you did a pretty good taking that stereotype apart. You don't waste time telling things we don't need to know, that's what I like in your writing.
Anyways, I haven't visited in a long time, and there's quite a lot new stuff to read.
On to the rest then :-).
5Aake RedfieldI like this. Funny and well-written piece of work. I think you did a pretty good taking that stereotype apart. You don't waste time telling things we don't need to know, that's what I like in your writing.
Anyways, I haven't visited in a long time, and there's quite a lot new stuff to read.
On to the rest then :-).
3/21/2004 c1 20crucified sadist
I love this, no...I utterly adore this. *laughs faintly* Im glad you liked my story, "Viola." I orignally began writing it for a Creative Writing project at school. But my teacher got mad at me because she thought it was plagarised. (forgive me my spelling is horrid.) The only reason she thought that was because im only 15 and the story sounded too advanced. Anyways, I really love this. It sounds so...damn, im at a loss for words. Needless to say I enjoyed it greatly.
20crucified sadistI love this, no...I utterly adore this. *laughs faintly* Im glad you liked my story, "Viola." I orignally began writing it for a Creative Writing project at school. But my teacher got mad at me because she thought it was plagarised. (forgive me my spelling is horrid.) The only reason she thought that was because im only 15 and the story sounded too advanced. Anyways, I really love this. It sounds so...damn, im at a loss for words. Needless to say I enjoyed it greatly.
3/20/2004 c1 6bobbysinblack
i have an assignment like that at the moment! its about representations...but anyway that was really good, you got the voice of the husband down pat. and the wife sounds like my mum. abuse isn't fun whether it's your mum or your dad... but yeah it's good that the husband dude got away. nicely done :D
6bobbysinblacki have an assignment like that at the moment! its about representations...but anyway that was really good, you got the voice of the husband down pat. and the wife sounds like my mum. abuse isn't fun whether it's your mum or your dad... but yeah it's good that the husband dude got away. nicely done :D
3/19/2004 c1 2BLARGH00000009
I love the conversational tone. How he sounds so casual about all of it. . . it adds to the impact, in the end, I think. This is really great! MORE, I SAY!
2BLARGH00000009I love the conversational tone. How he sounds so casual about all of it. . . it adds to the impact, in the end, I think. This is really great! MORE, I SAY!
3/19/2004 c1 1Hobbitch
Awesome. :D I really liked the narration. It was ... unique. ^^ Kinda reminds me of my Dad. x_X; Anyways, good job.
1HobbitchAwesome. :D I really liked the narration. It was ... unique. ^^ Kinda reminds me of my Dad. x_X; Anyways, good job.
3/19/2004 c1 Bracken
Hah! Very nice irony indeed. Interesting use of gender roles to say the least.
Hah! Very nice irony indeed. Interesting use of gender roles to say the least.