for Miserable Love6/29/2004 c1 sailor taurus angel
aaww that is really good! and sad but still good, I know what its like to be in that place, and i hated it! but what you wrote there is exactly how i felt. you reviewed my poem a while ago on fanfiction.net and i looked up your name to find you but at the time i was'ent on FP and so i didnt find you until now sorry ^_^U by the way you have many good poems and i think it is SO cool you have your own band! well T.T.F.N.
ta ta for now!
*tauro-chan*
aaww that is really good! and sad but still good, I know what its like to be in that place, and i hated it! but what you wrote there is exactly how i felt. you reviewed my poem a while ago on fanfiction.net and i looked up your name to find you but at the time i was'ent on FP and so i didnt find you until now sorry ^_^U by the way you have many good poems and i think it is SO cool you have your own band! well T.T.F.N.
ta ta for now!
*tauro-chan*
5/1/2004 c1 takuan9
hey, sorry to burst someone's bubble, but this poem is simply cliche. everyone has these feelings at some point, and the poet makes no effort to spice it up/ make it interesting to anyone else. these free verses may have been good therapy, but they are mediocre poetry. suggestions to author- make your poem unique! eliminate the cliche feeling by describing your love in detail, describing yourself and the nature of your relationship- BE SPECIFIC. try harder to play with words- rhyme, alliterate, etc look for rhythm.
on a positive note, the tone is solid and the word choices are good and make sense. there are no stylistic or grammatical errors.
check out my site/writing at xanga.com/takuan9
hey, sorry to burst someone's bubble, but this poem is simply cliche. everyone has these feelings at some point, and the poet makes no effort to spice it up/ make it interesting to anyone else. these free verses may have been good therapy, but they are mediocre poetry. suggestions to author- make your poem unique! eliminate the cliche feeling by describing your love in detail, describing yourself and the nature of your relationship- BE SPECIFIC. try harder to play with words- rhyme, alliterate, etc look for rhythm.
on a positive note, the tone is solid and the word choices are good and make sense. there are no stylistic or grammatical errors.
check out my site/writing at xanga.com/takuan9
4/15/2004 c1 Sara Bickley
Irregular rhymed verse is hard to write well, and I'm impressed with how inevitable you've made it seem. Only one of the rhymes (lot/shot) seems forced.
Irregular rhymed verse is hard to write well, and I'm impressed with how inevitable you've made it seem. Only one of the rhymes (lot/shot) seems forced.
4/10/2004 c1 
34Juliet-of-the-stars
I can so relate to this poem! It was like you were watching what I was going through and put it into words. And you did a great job, at that.
34Juliet-of-the-starsI can so relate to this poem! It was like you were watching what I was going through and put it into words. And you did a great job, at that.
4/10/2004 c1 34marabelle
good idea, good structure, but still forced rhymes ^^ oh well, i like the poem: i connect to it well
sarah.
34marabellegood idea, good structure, but still forced rhymes ^^ oh well, i like the poem: i connect to it well
sarah.
4/10/2004 c1 71meaningless parasite
y is it that its alwasys girls chasing boys? lol love sux. lets face it
71meaningless parasitey is it that its alwasys girls chasing boys? lol love sux. lets face it
4/8/2004 c1 9H.N.Roberts
Woah, this poem is very close to my heart. I know exactly where you are coming from..please keep writing more stuff like this!
*the heatherness*
9H.N.RobertsWoah, this poem is very close to my heart. I know exactly where you are coming from..please keep writing more stuff like this!
*the heatherness*
4/7/2004 c1 88breakme
Hey thanks for reviewing my poem. I like this peice as well as some of your others. I expecially like the lines...
'I'm so tired of trying
When inside I'm dying'
Very nice work!
88breakmeHey thanks for reviewing my poem. I like this peice as well as some of your others. I expecially like the lines...
'I'm so tired of trying
When inside I'm dying'
Very nice work!
4/6/2004 c1 5Crimsonoaks
This was good. I could really relate to what you were saying. I liked how you showed a range of things you felt.
5CrimsonoaksThis was good. I could really relate to what you were saying. I liked how you showed a range of things you felt.