for Fallen4/11/2004 c1 Rose of Darkness 666
Wow, very good. The rhyme thing is really steady in there. I will read more of your poems.
PS. Thanks for the reviews! :)
Wow, very good. The rhyme thing is really steady in there. I will read more of your poems.
PS. Thanks for the reviews! :)
4/10/2004 c1 
234The Moribund Marionette
Very deep. Sorry-I'm sure you're sick of hearing that. I know I am. That's pretty much what MOST say about my work on fictionpress, anyway (i've only been a member since last night). You have a lot of talent. You use it to write great songs as well, I'm sure? Anyway, if you haven't already, you should check out this author: Rose of Darkness 6. She's awesome, and she, in a way, relates to your style of writing. Keep writing-you obviously have the soul for it!
234The Moribund MarionetteVery deep. Sorry-I'm sure you're sick of hearing that. I know I am. That's pretty much what MOST say about my work on fictionpress, anyway (i've only been a member since last night). You have a lot of talent. You use it to write great songs as well, I'm sure? Anyway, if you haven't already, you should check out this author: Rose of Darkness 6. She's awesome, and she, in a way, relates to your style of writing. Keep writing-you obviously have the soul for it!
4/10/2004 c1 70cmetalangel249
Ah I like it. It makes me think of how I felt before, when it feels like you just kind of fall out of control...and you can't stop it.
70cmetalangel249Ah I like it. It makes me think of how I felt before, when it feels like you just kind of fall out of control...and you can't stop it.
4/10/2004 c1 Alchemist 3xx3
The flow is this poem is very nice and it's something many people can relate to. Good job!
The flow is this poem is very nice and it's something many people can relate to. Good job!
4/9/2004 c1 5Eldariel
i like most of your poems. they're like something right up my alley. hope you write some more soon.
by the way, thanks for reviewing my story/dream. i'm not used to someone actually leaving comments. thanks
5Eldarieli like most of your poems. they're like something right up my alley. hope you write some more soon.
by the way, thanks for reviewing my story/dream. i'm not used to someone actually leaving comments. thanks
4/9/2004 c1 18Anne Turner
hey. nice poem. loved the ending "but i really fell in this thing called life" good job. keep it up. bye the way thanks for my first review!
18Anne Turnerhey. nice poem. loved the ending "but i really fell in this thing called life" good job. keep it up. bye the way thanks for my first review!
4/8/2004 c1 12jacobcello
HI
I loved this poem. It was great. I like the rhyme and then no rhyme pattern. It gives the poem texture. I'll stop now or ill just start
babbling. But really this poem makes you think. Thats good.
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12jacobcelloHI
I loved this poem. It was great. I like the rhyme and then no rhyme pattern. It gives the poem texture. I'll stop now or ill just start
babbling. But really this poem makes you think. Thats good.
AU REVOIR
JACOB
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4/8/2004 c1 21Cobalt Cat
Fabulous, thank you for reviewing my poem. Your's is utterly fabulous. It's briliant and I'm probably going to ramble about this for a vary long time.
21Cobalt CatFabulous, thank you for reviewing my poem. Your's is utterly fabulous. It's briliant and I'm probably going to ramble about this for a vary long time.
4/6/2004 c1 5Crimsonoaks
I liked how in the beginning it was sad, middle hopeful and how the end weighed both feelings in.
5CrimsonoaksI liked how in the beginning it was sad, middle hopeful and how the end weighed both feelings in.