for The Shadow6/2/2004 c1 
74RandomGoth
A simply stuning piece of poetry, that has a real flow to it, you girls really know what you are dong when it comes to poetry. Please keep writing, I love the lines 'Sometimes it feels like grime becauee it can't help to be itself with it's own personality'
Your rhymes are stunning, I rarely find a poet who can rhyme so naturally, so many poems seem like the rhyming was an after thought and they have pushed the poem into the rhyme creating something that is ugly and makes me feel like someone has pulled it's wings off.
Thank you for sharing and for reviewing my poetry.
Yours in randomness!
RG
74RandomGothA simply stuning piece of poetry, that has a real flow to it, you girls really know what you are dong when it comes to poetry. Please keep writing, I love the lines 'Sometimes it feels like grime becauee it can't help to be itself with it's own personality'
Your rhymes are stunning, I rarely find a poet who can rhyme so naturally, so many poems seem like the rhyming was an after thought and they have pushed the poem into the rhyme creating something that is ugly and makes me feel like someone has pulled it's wings off.
Thank you for sharing and for reviewing my poetry.
Yours in randomness!
RG
4/11/2004 c1 Alunaer Bellringer
How true...so many in this world are persecuted for their own originality. This poem flows along, carries an emotion so deep...thanks.
Excellent poem. Your works are very well written.
How true...so many in this world are persecuted for their own originality. This poem flows along, carries an emotion so deep...thanks.
Excellent poem. Your works are very well written.
4/10/2004 c1 6Darling
It's not a bad poem. Your rhyming feels a little forced in places, but you have a strong piece overall. I like it. It's got personality.
6DarlingIt's not a bad poem. Your rhyming feels a little forced in places, but you have a strong piece overall. I like it. It's got personality.
4/10/2004 c1 47Kira of Hecale
Nice. Very concise and to the point, but there's plenty of metaphors in there, too.
47Kira of HecaleNice. Very concise and to the point, but there's plenty of metaphors in there, too.
4/10/2004 c1 157Nay and Ayeka
very nice poem and i love the idea...but the rhyming seems too forced. i think you'd write a much better peace if it were free verse and no specific rhyming patterns...you have beautiful ideas and they would be able to flourish much more freely without rhymes.
still, a great peace of work.
157Nay and Ayekavery nice poem and i love the idea...but the rhyming seems too forced. i think you'd write a much better peace if it were free verse and no specific rhyming patterns...you have beautiful ideas and they would be able to flourish much more freely without rhymes.
still, a great peace of work.
4/10/2004 c1 13Bandbingo
SPELL CHECK PLEASE! one of the things that stuck out as an error was that you used here when you should have used hear. i thought it a little strange how at first you portrayed the shadow as evil and then not really evil but lonely and helpless.
if you can find the time it would be great if you could read some of my poems and tell me what you think of them. thanks! ~Bandbingo~
13BandbingoSPELL CHECK PLEASE! one of the things that stuck out as an error was that you used here when you should have used hear. i thought it a little strange how at first you portrayed the shadow as evil and then not really evil but lonely and helpless.
if you can find the time it would be great if you could read some of my poems and tell me what you think of them. thanks! ~Bandbingo~
4/10/2004 c1 5Saraluna
thought this was pretty good, but I was wondering why you gave me 2 reveiws, one on a peom, and one on a short story, and both the reveiws were identicle. DO you do this to everyone? did you actually read my story?
5Saralunathought this was pretty good, but I was wondering why you gave me 2 reveiws, one on a peom, and one on a short story, and both the reveiws were identicle. DO you do this to everyone? did you actually read my story?
4/10/2004 c1 1Lady-Destiny
this poem made me think of how many people tend to pretend to be what they're not, just to fit in. I liked it! thanks for the reveiw by the way!
1Lady-Destinythis poem made me think of how many people tend to pretend to be what they're not, just to fit in. I liked it! thanks for the reveiw by the way!
4/10/2004 c1 71meaningless parasite
really good, i kinda figured it was either about yourself or about the reader from the beginning, but other people who mayb think of themselves as great people and everthing might not. well done. all very tue
71meaningless parasitereally good, i kinda figured it was either about yourself or about the reader from the beginning, but other people who mayb think of themselves as great people and everthing might not. well done. all very tue
4/9/2004 c1 35seriouseffort
You changed my ideas of a shadow, but i am not sure if i caught the full meaning of the poem. I tend to read through them a bit fast. It is one of my favorites though. I still cant help think of it in a rhetorical sense but i tend to try to relate to all of the poems i read. Ah, enough of my mouth, great job.
35seriouseffortYou changed my ideas of a shadow, but i am not sure if i caught the full meaning of the poem. I tend to read through them a bit fast. It is one of my favorites though. I still cant help think of it in a rhetorical sense but i tend to try to relate to all of the poems i read. Ah, enough of my mouth, great job.