for Manda Rider 3: Endgame4/12/2004 c3 Brooke ORiley
more! more! sorry that's not very helpful, but i wanna read more!
more! more! sorry that's not very helpful, but i wanna read more!
4/12/2004 c3 tzncz
Gosh, Michael is a strange mysterious character. We're finding out more and more about him as we read, aren't we? Cool... keep writing!
Gosh, Michael is a strange mysterious character. We're finding out more and more about him as we read, aren't we? Cool... keep writing!
4/11/2004 c3 Silver Phoenix11
I'm glad Michael didn't sign the marriage agreement! Hmm.. I wonder why Angela wants him back? LOL. I love the phone conversation between Manda and Michael.
I'm glad Michael didn't sign the marriage agreement! Hmm.. I wonder why Angela wants him back? LOL. I love the phone conversation between Manda and Michael.
4/11/2004 c3 freedman121
What time period is this set in? Cause at least in the 21st century there really aren't any arranged marriages anymore that I know of.
This is really good. It brings up all kinds of problems and questions that I really want answers to. Just one thing, in the first chapter (I think anyways) Mr. Mackenzie used "there's" and it didn't seem to fit. I think you should have used there is, because it works with the sentence, and with his character better.
Freedman
What time period is this set in? Cause at least in the 21st century there really aren't any arranged marriages anymore that I know of.
This is really good. It brings up all kinds of problems and questions that I really want answers to. Just one thing, in the first chapter (I think anyways) Mr. Mackenzie used "there's" and it didn't seem to fit. I think you should have used there is, because it works with the sentence, and with his character better.
Freedman
4/11/2004 c2 tzncz
Oh, a note! How exciting. That was a funny incident at the gym. Lol. Very funny! Keep writing, and update soon!
Oh, a note! How exciting. That was a funny incident at the gym. Lol. Very funny! Keep writing, and update soon!
4/7/2004 c2 
7Lightness
ohh no. something bads gonna happen.
cliffhangers are not cool. you need to write some more really soon.
7Lightnessohh no. something bads gonna happen.
cliffhangers are not cool. you need to write some more really soon.
4/7/2004 c2 Silver Phoenix11
Poor Manda. Her birthday's not what she expected. Why do I have a bad feeling about this? Lol. Manda's line of thought at Michael's question was pretty funny.
Poor Manda. Her birthday's not what she expected. Why do I have a bad feeling about this? Lol. Manda's line of thought at Michael's question was pretty funny.
4/7/2004 c1 Silver Phoenix11
Your sequel is getting better and better! Your characters seem so real. I love Michael. He's such a gentleman, and his past sounds very intriguing. What sort of crime could he possibly had done? And who's Angela?
Your sequel is getting better and better! Your characters seem so real. I love Michael. He's such a gentleman, and his past sounds very intriguing. What sort of crime could he possibly had done? And who's Angela?
4/6/2004 c2 2sahnetorte
Poor Manda. If only this Cherry didn't butt in. And looks like someone's onto Michael now. The suspense!
Update soon.
2sahnetortePoor Manda. If only this Cherry didn't butt in. And looks like someone's onto Michael now. The suspense!
Update soon.
4/4/2004 c2 lostinscotland
eek! you're just always beating up on them, aren't you? 'course, i suppose that's generally rhe way it is with young sleuths like them, but... ::sigh::
and what's the deal with cherry? i dun trust her
eek! you're just always beating up on them, aren't you? 'course, i suppose that's generally rhe way it is with young sleuths like them, but... ::sigh::
and what's the deal with cherry? i dun trust her
3/24/2004 c1 sahnetorte
Very intriguing for first chapter. I now can see why Michael and his father had never gotten along. I wonder who's Angela. I guess i'll find out soon enough!
Very intriguing for first chapter. I now can see why Michael and his father had never gotten along. I wonder who's Angela. I guess i'll find out soon enough!
3/23/2004 c1 7Lightness
alright! its great to see another manda rider story again.
youve just jumped right in. youre a wonderful author and you create very interesting storylines. this is going to be exciting. i cant wait for the next chapter. :).
whats all this about being charged for manslaughter? and this angela person? well whatever/whoever that is.. im sure youll be getting into it pretty soon so ill save time and energy and stop right here.
keep writing, kay. update soon. bye now.
7Lightnessalright! its great to see another manda rider story again.
youve just jumped right in. youre a wonderful author and you create very interesting storylines. this is going to be exciting. i cant wait for the next chapter. :).
whats all this about being charged for manslaughter? and this angela person? well whatever/whoever that is.. im sure youll be getting into it pretty soon so ill save time and energy and stop right here.
keep writing, kay. update soon. bye now.