for With A Kiss5/29/2005 c1 zhi
Nice work keeping it short and sweet- it seems more potent that way. I like that you opened the piece with a question and ended it with that statement about welcoming death as you welcomed the reader. Good job, also, staying away from rhyme and any real confining meter like some kids tend to do. Good job, keep it up!Just returning the favor,-Z-
Nice work keeping it short and sweet- it seems more potent that way. I like that you opened the piece with a question and ended it with that statement about welcoming death as you welcomed the reader. Good job, also, staying away from rhyme and any real confining meter like some kids tend to do. Good job, keep it up!Just returning the favor,-Z-
8/12/2004 c1 
17flashofnothing
loving your work and this is no different. I think the shortness made it more emphasised.. I don't know just like it as is.
.:flash:.
17flashofnothingloving your work and this is no different. I think the shortness made it more emphasised.. I don't know just like it as is.
.:flash:.
3/27/2004 c1 119AntiPleasure
Could be expanded a bit more but it's still well written. Not much that I can say but nicely done.
Jenna xx
119AntiPleasureCould be expanded a bit more but it's still well written. Not much that I can say but nicely done.
Jenna xx
3/25/2004 c1 28Deluminated
I love the sarcasm. You were right in your summary, though. It is very short.
28DeluminatedI love the sarcasm. You were right in your summary, though. It is very short.