for The Hands6/28/2004 c1 
22PheonixSlayer
grr. proof read! otherwise, good short story. creepy, remember what teacher said about it?
22PheonixSlayergrr. proof read! otherwise, good short story. creepy, remember what teacher said about it?
3/28/2004 c1 alphabetagamma
Not too bad, but you need to read through for errors (acheive! not archive!) and typos. It isn't a bad central idea, but it feels more like a good first draft than a completed story - I think you need to try and make it a bit longer, as you don't give the suspence any time to build. The bit where your protagonist says that he won't mention how the body was disposed of is also a noticeable weak spot - it would be better just to say it was disposed of, as this way makes it obvious that you can't think of any way it could have been done.
Not too bad, but you need to read through for errors (acheive! not archive!) and typos. It isn't a bad central idea, but it feels more like a good first draft than a completed story - I think you need to try and make it a bit longer, as you don't give the suspence any time to build. The bit where your protagonist says that he won't mention how the body was disposed of is also a noticeable weak spot - it would be better just to say it was disposed of, as this way makes it obvious that you can't think of any way it could have been done.