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6/28/2004 c1 22PheonixSlayer
grr. proof read! otherwise, good short story. creepy, remember what teacher said about it?
4/4/2004 c1 30Fuu Hououji1
Wow. Disturbing. In a Poe sort of way. I LIKE IT VERY MUCH!
3/28/2004 c1 alphabetagamma
Not too bad, but you need to read through for errors (acheive! not archive!) and typos. It isn't a bad central idea, but it feels more like a good first draft than a completed story - I think you need to try and make it a bit longer, as you don't give the suspence any time to build. The bit where your protagonist says that he won't mention how the body was disposed of is also a noticeable weak spot - it would be better just to say it was disposed of, as this way makes it obvious that you can't think of any way it could have been done.
3/26/2004 c1 2Aikawarazu Ai
i like it ^_^x very good

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