for All Play and No Work11/1/2013 c13 
16Aretice N. Treader
I'm kind of wondering how Blair has a picture of Leslie doing drugs in a photo album without anyone knowing or caring... This was a cute chapter. Good job!
16Aretice N. TreaderI'm kind of wondering how Blair has a picture of Leslie doing drugs in a photo album without anyone knowing or caring... This was a cute chapter. Good job!
11/1/2013 c12 Aretice N. Treader
This was a rather short chapter, but it was still good. I didn't see any grammatical mistakes, and I can tell Blair's starting to realize her feelings.
This was a rather short chapter, but it was still good. I didn't see any grammatical mistakes, and I can tell Blair's starting to realize her feelings.
11/1/2013 c11 Aretice N. Treader
This was a good chapter. It was a nice break from a lot of the drama, like the Leah stuff. I think Blair's grandmother is funny, too. Even though you accidentally replaced "way" with "was" somewhere in this chapter, it was still fairly good.
This was a good chapter. It was a nice break from a lot of the drama, like the Leah stuff. I think Blair's grandmother is funny, too. Even though you accidentally replaced "way" with "was" somewhere in this chapter, it was still fairly good.
11/1/2013 c10 Aretice N. Treader
I wonder why Leah abuses Blair... Does she feel inferior when Blair receives compliments, or is it something else? I didn't notice very many mistakes. This was a pretty good chapter.
I wonder why Leah abuses Blair... Does she feel inferior when Blair receives compliments, or is it something else? I didn't notice very many mistakes. This was a pretty good chapter.
11/1/2013 c9 Aretice N. Treader
I have the feeling that Leah's presence is going to reveal some sort of dark secret. I think that "useable" is supposed be spelled as "usable," but I'm not sure.
I have the feeling that Leah's presence is going to reveal some sort of dark secret. I think that "useable" is supposed be spelled as "usable," but I'm not sure.
10/29/2013 c8 Aretice N. Treader
This chapter was hilarious! I love a lot of the little quirks you've given to your characters, such as Tom's fruit obsession. Thanks for putting in that huge hint of what Leah and Leslie did to Blair/Pippa.
This chapter was hilarious! I love a lot of the little quirks you've given to your characters, such as Tom's fruit obsession. Thanks for putting in that huge hint of what Leah and Leslie did to Blair/Pippa.
10/29/2013 c7 Aretice N. Treader
So, you accidentally wrote that "Eddie had the it..." I'm not sure if "the it" is quite right, but I could be wrong. This chapter was funny and written rather well.
So, you accidentally wrote that "Eddie had the it..." I'm not sure if "the it" is quite right, but I could be wrong. This chapter was funny and written rather well.
10/29/2013 c6 Aretice N. Treader
That was an unexpected development. I would never have guessed that Matt and Leslie were cousins. I didn't see any grammatical errors. You are talented in ways I can't even imagine.
That was an unexpected development. I would never have guessed that Matt and Leslie were cousins. I didn't see any grammatical errors. You are talented in ways I can't even imagine.
10/29/2013 c5 Aretice N. Treader
The ill feelings between Blair and Matt are hilarious. I think that it's a good balance for darker secrets that will probably be revealed later. I didn't see any grammar mistakes. Good job!
The ill feelings between Blair and Matt are hilarious. I think that it's a good balance for darker secrets that will probably be revealed later. I didn't see any grammar mistakes. Good job!
10/28/2013 c4 Aretice N. Treader
Well, that was unexpected. I didn't really have any problems with the grammar of this chapter.
Well, that was unexpected. I didn't really have any problems with the grammar of this chapter.
10/28/2013 c3 Aretice N. Treader
I like your characters. They have a certain kind of charm to them. Blair seems like there's a lot more to her than meets the eye, though for now she is quite shallow. I didn't notice any mistakes.
I like your characters. They have a certain kind of charm to them. Blair seems like there's a lot more to her than meets the eye, though for now she is quite shallow. I didn't notice any mistakes.
10/28/2013 c2 Aretice N. Treader
I like your sense of humor. Your characters seem to be well-developed, though I don't know very much about them quite yet. You write very well, too. Good job!
I like your sense of humor. Your characters seem to be well-developed, though I don't know very much about them quite yet. You write very well, too. Good job!
10/28/2013 c1 Aretice N. Treader
I like the storyline. It seems really interesting. I think this first chapter was written very well, though I don't exactly agree with Blair about school.
I like the storyline. It seems really interesting. I think this first chapter was written very well, though I don't exactly agree with Blair about school.
7/30/2013 c25 1P.F Ally
Aaaaaa I wonder if there's more :'D also, PIPPA OHMYGOD. She's just so adorable in the previous chapter I can't even tell you how much I love her. And matthew...I don't know. I really like him too lol :'D a
1P.F AllyAaaaaa I wonder if there's more :'D also, PIPPA OHMYGOD. She's just so adorable in the previous chapter I can't even tell you how much I love her. And matthew...I don't know. I really like him too lol :'D a
7/15/2013 c10 Secrets
That is just...terrible ;(
I have a younger sister and I can't even imagine doing that to her, the little goochie-pie :*
sure we get into a lotta fights ,but it's always verbal, though sometimes it involves her hitting me (she's 3yrs old) and me trying to stop her.
That is just...terrible ;(
I have a younger sister and I can't even imagine doing that to her, the little goochie-pie :*
sure we get into a lotta fights ,but it's always verbal, though sometimes it involves her hitting me (she's 3yrs old) and me trying to stop her.