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22moonlight543
Your great! There were a few typos, thogh. Keep up the good work!
(In all seriousness, this was really good. It was hilarious and very true. The sarcastic tone was excellent and you seem to have a talent for satire. Do keep up the good work.)
22moonlight543Your great! There were a few typos, thogh. Keep up the good work!
(In all seriousness, this was really good. It was hilarious and very true. The sarcastic tone was excellent and you seem to have a talent for satire. Do keep up the good work.)
9/18/2013 c1 Just Passed By
I was frowning while reading the first part of this first chapter, thinking, "What the hell is this dude (or maybe, a chick?) saying?"
I continued reading (still frowning, mind you), nonetheless, only to facepalmed in the middle when I realized that this damn thing is a SATIRE! That explains why I disagreed with all of what you are saying, since I took it as some serious tips?! The hell was wrong with me! T.T I think, I was really too sleepy so I didn't catch the sarcasms soon.
Now, that's said. This is already hilarious and I am only done with the first chapter.
I was frowning while reading the first part of this first chapter, thinking, "What the hell is this dude (or maybe, a chick?) saying?"
I continued reading (still frowning, mind you), nonetheless, only to facepalmed in the middle when I realized that this damn thing is a SATIRE! That explains why I disagreed with all of what you are saying, since I took it as some serious tips?! The hell was wrong with me! T.T I think, I was really too sleepy so I didn't catch the sarcasms soon.
Now, that's said. This is already hilarious and I am only done with the first chapter.
3/2/2013 c2 16The Queen Elsa
Your great! There were a few typos, thogh. Keep up the good work!
Sea? i lerned somting from tis!
16The Queen ElsaYour great! There were a few typos, thogh. Keep up the good work!
Sea? i lerned somting from tis!
11/16/2010 c1 Eden
The genre is priceless. Parody/Horror. Wow!
The genre is priceless. Parody/Horror. Wow!
3/22/2010 c3 1Jabberjay
What a lovely essay! I truly enjoyed every minute of it and will make sure to spread the message! (just kidding) That was an epic essay. :)
1JabberjayWhat a lovely essay! I truly enjoyed every minute of it and will make sure to spread the message! (just kidding) That was an epic essay. :)
10/13/2009 c3 1Zoius and the Devil
this story is quite humorous. occasionally you sound a bit condescending, and sometimes the sarcasm is too much, but i still found it amusing. good work.
-zozo
1Zoius and the Devilthis story is quite humorous. occasionally you sound a bit condescending, and sometimes the sarcasm is too much, but i still found it amusing. good work.
-zozo
4/20/2008 c3 16One-Hand Clap
I am really tempted to reply:
"Your great! There were a few typos, thogh. Keep up the good work!"
But I won't, because it wouldn't be doing this story justice - everything about this was absoloutely hilarious. Even my toes ended up hurting from laughing. And the thing about 'doesn't mean I'm an environmentalist' - ahahaha! Honestly, on a scale of one to ten in the funnies, this is a ten.
However, there are several annoying things that I'm putting down to damn FP uploading dramas. Some of the paragraphs were stuck together, which I think you should fix up (if you ever rewrite this). Anyways, this was amazing. I loved it. The humour was out of this world, and it's favourited (the story, that is!)
- clap trap, from review marathon [link in my profile]
16One-Hand ClapI am really tempted to reply:
"Your great! There were a few typos, thogh. Keep up the good work!"
But I won't, because it wouldn't be doing this story justice - everything about this was absoloutely hilarious. Even my toes ended up hurting from laughing. And the thing about 'doesn't mean I'm an environmentalist' - ahahaha! Honestly, on a scale of one to ten in the funnies, this is a ten.
However, there are several annoying things that I'm putting down to damn FP uploading dramas. Some of the paragraphs were stuck together, which I think you should fix up (if you ever rewrite this). Anyways, this was amazing. I loved it. The humour was out of this world, and it's favourited (the story, that is!)
- clap trap, from review marathon [link in my profile]
2/10/2008 c1 scrappy
tongue in cheek tone is totally hilarious and almost believable. the intended use of intelligent vocabulary and good wordsmithing is props for mocking. xDD Love this, and I will be sure to come back here if I ever write a story.
tongue in cheek tone is totally hilarious and almost believable. the intended use of intelligent vocabulary and good wordsmithing is props for mocking. xDD Love this, and I will be sure to come back here if I ever write a story.
12/26/2007 c3 2mia5081
I'm not sure, but I think a tear of laughter just slipped down my cheek. The piece was absolutely amazing, and I was really hoping that if someone else was reading it they were understanding that this is what not to do-fantastic. Not sure what else would show my love of this, except for adding it to my favorites list.
Nice work on the satire (I know my English teacher would be very proud of you :D)
~Mia
2mia5081I'm not sure, but I think a tear of laughter just slipped down my cheek. The piece was absolutely amazing, and I was really hoping that if someone else was reading it they were understanding that this is what not to do-fantastic. Not sure what else would show my love of this, except for adding it to my favorites list.
Nice work on the satire (I know my English teacher would be very proud of you :D)
~Mia
11/6/2007 c3 2AminalLuv
Your SO ROOD! Just b-cause I right crap and my revuse SUCK don't mean I need to gro as a righter, you pig headed sow. I hope you DYE a thousand horrable DEATHS and get eatten by a 500 pond lumberjack. Go to HELL you floozy.
-see, I learned, aren't you proud of me?
In all honesty though, I found this really enojyable. I hope people can read this and laugh at themselves and then maybe try to improve, since even the best writers and reviewers fall victim to thes traps from time to time. I hope that I have taken something away from this essay as well-starting with this review. Thanks.
2AminalLuvYour SO ROOD! Just b-cause I right crap and my revuse SUCK don't mean I need to gro as a righter, you pig headed sow. I hope you DYE a thousand horrable DEATHS and get eatten by a 500 pond lumberjack. Go to HELL you floozy.
-see, I learned, aren't you proud of me?
In all honesty though, I found this really enojyable. I hope people can read this and laugh at themselves and then maybe try to improve, since even the best writers and reviewers fall victim to thes traps from time to time. I hope that I have taken something away from this essay as well-starting with this review. Thanks.
8/11/2007 c3 8audsome
Does that little thing at the end mean that there is no more?
Everything was wonderful... maybe I should just copy the same review I gave the last essay I read. I think you left out a "to" in the last sentence of the third paragraph, it reads "If you manage get permanently banned"
8audsomeDoes that little thing at the end mean that there is no more?
Everything was wonderful... maybe I should just copy the same review I gave the last essay I read. I think you left out a "to" in the last sentence of the third paragraph, it reads "If you manage get permanently banned"
7/31/2007 c3 3Mad Paladin
Wow, this is some biting satire. I love it! :D
Quite the slap in the face of a lot of people.
Excellent instructional tone, while being ridiculous.
Nice.
3Mad PaladinWow, this is some biting satire. I love it! :D
Quite the slap in the face of a lot of people.
Excellent instructional tone, while being ridiculous.
Nice.
5/31/2007 c3 3imsorandom
You are a idoit! Just beacuz i rite bad storiez and criticice other pplez work does that mean I'm a bad critic n u haff to make fun of me!
PACK UP YOUR PAJAMAS AND GO TO THE BAHAJAS U LOSERR! And fix those typos! I
hope everybody readz this n hates u cuz im maturer n ur not!
hehe, i couldn't help myself! anywayy, i LOVED this piece it was absolutely hilarious especially the r/r / railroad thing (i laughed for half an hour for that one) and the 'Fix those typos, thogh' (LOL) and the whole FLAMEWAR thing. Your straight-out sarcasm was refreshing and totally funny. thanks a lot for posting this!
3imsorandomYou are a idoit! Just beacuz i rite bad storiez and criticice other pplez work does that mean I'm a bad critic n u haff to make fun of me!
PACK UP YOUR PAJAMAS AND GO TO THE BAHAJAS U LOSERR! And fix those typos! I
hope everybody readz this n hates u cuz im maturer n ur not!
hehe, i couldn't help myself! anywayy, i LOVED this piece it was absolutely hilarious especially the r/r / railroad thing (i laughed for half an hour for that one) and the 'Fix those typos, thogh' (LOL) and the whole FLAMEWAR thing. Your straight-out sarcasm was refreshing and totally funny. thanks a lot for posting this!
4/15/2007 c3 1Persistent Vegetative State
This entire idea has been done to death!
To death!
I'm not sure why you even wrote such a long diatribe, since the only people with the patience to read this are people who aren't 13 years old and have monkeys for brains, so I guess you were aiming at people of a somewhat higher sophistication.
Well guess what? We're dead! Yup!
Satire is best when it's short and to the point. One-liners which sum up paragraphs, not paragraphs that don't end. 3-4 item lists are preferable to multiple lists where the items are two sentences long.
This was too long, I started reading it but fell asleep and ended up with drool on my shirt and the imprint of my keyboard on my cheek.
In any case, good day, and FP sucks.
1Persistent Vegetative StateThis entire idea has been done to death!
To death!
I'm not sure why you even wrote such a long diatribe, since the only people with the patience to read this are people who aren't 13 years old and have monkeys for brains, so I guess you were aiming at people of a somewhat higher sophistication.
Well guess what? We're dead! Yup!
Satire is best when it's short and to the point. One-liners which sum up paragraphs, not paragraphs that don't end. 3-4 item lists are preferable to multiple lists where the items are two sentences long.
This was too long, I started reading it but fell asleep and ended up with drool on my shirt and the imprint of my keyboard on my cheek.
In any case, good day, and FP sucks.
3/25/2007 c3 L. Sweet
Now I'm scared that I might be a good writer
I particularly like the critique examples. Really, such excellent reviews. I can only hope to get one like that myself...
Now I'm scared that I might be a good writer
I particularly like the critique examples. Really, such excellent reviews. I can only hope to get one like that myself...