for The Trimage4/11/2004 c1 
4aragorn-lover2001
E! Poor Dragon! Sorry, I love dragons and all other mythical type creatures, but I don't see the majority of them as evil!
This is an interesting story though.
4aragorn-lover2001E! Poor Dragon! Sorry, I love dragons and all other mythical type creatures, but I don't see the majority of them as evil!
This is an interesting story though.
4/1/2004 c1 13Jester V Zackwell
unique. dragon killing...cool. short but cool. i liked it alot. e-mail me some time and we can talk about story or poem ideas
13Jester V Zackwellunique. dragon killing...cool. short but cool. i liked it alot. e-mail me some time and we can talk about story or poem ideas
3/31/2004 c1 el perro fantastico
hey this is pretty good. i like your descriptions. i think its a little random that you have a character taht we dont know very well fighitng a dragon in the middle of nowhere for no apparent reason. and if someone tied her down would they just let her walk away. its not bad though and u know where to reach me if u want to talk about it. revie wmy latest story. the begginning sucks but it gets better. ZEPPELIN FOREVER!
hey this is pretty good. i like your descriptions. i think its a little random that you have a character taht we dont know very well fighitng a dragon in the middle of nowhere for no apparent reason. and if someone tied her down would they just let her walk away. its not bad though and u know where to reach me if u want to talk about it. revie wmy latest story. the begginning sucks but it gets better. ZEPPELIN FOREVER!
3/31/2004 c1 Rednal29
Interesting story. Please make more.
Interesting story. Please make more.
3/31/2004 c1 2Blauer Ausserirdische
The first chapter is a little short. You could have added something before and after, like how she got into the position she was in, or at least hint at it, or in the end you can write part of her journey in the forest. There is also an excess use of "she". Try "the girl" or her name in a few places where you placed "she". Also, don't start all of your sentences with nouns/pronouns. Try infinitives, prepositional phrases, anything (though don't overdo that). Otherwise, it's a nice start, and I would like to see the story continued!
2Blauer AusserirdischeThe first chapter is a little short. You could have added something before and after, like how she got into the position she was in, or at least hint at it, or in the end you can write part of her journey in the forest. There is also an excess use of "she". Try "the girl" or her name in a few places where you placed "she". Also, don't start all of your sentences with nouns/pronouns. Try infinitives, prepositional phrases, anything (though don't overdo that). Otherwise, it's a nice start, and I would like to see the story continued!
3/31/2004 c1 Dark Lord Ven
I like the way you started by getting the reader involved in a fight. You could change the words around a little to get more out of them.
I like the way you started by getting the reader involved in a fight. You could change the words around a little to get more out of them.
3/31/2004 c1 Guest
Exellent!
GoodWork!
You are Growing as a Auther!
I expect greatness from you!
I will keep my self updated
I read you biography
I was born in Kansas and now live in virginia too, Yet I have said to much my idenity is aspare for fear of my true being I wish to not YET share-
I you want some good poetry(slightly morbid a times though) read some of my freind Jester V Zackwell's liturature(hes from VA too...and he make for great e-conversation aswell! check him out...just search for Jester V Zackwell
at the Author search menu.
Exellent!
GoodWork!
You are Growing as a Auther!
I expect greatness from you!
I will keep my self updated
I read you biography
I was born in Kansas and now live in virginia too, Yet I have said to much my idenity is aspare for fear of my true being I wish to not YET share-
I you want some good poetry(slightly morbid a times though) read some of my freind Jester V Zackwell's liturature(hes from VA too...and he make for great e-conversation aswell! check him out...just search for Jester V Zackwell
at the Author search menu.
3/31/2004 c1 J.T. Baever
hmm...i think this is lovely. your first chapter's not really the usual way authors start things out, but that's what's interesting about your story; it's kind of like...hmm...you skipped the formal intro on purpose in order to tell it throughout the story. you just kind of got to the point and not worried too much about setting and stuff. ooh, i'm really not making any sense now, am i? anyway, yours is a unique approach to story writing. i like it...lots. so great job! i'm looking forward to your next update.
~J.T.
hmm...i think this is lovely. your first chapter's not really the usual way authors start things out, but that's what's interesting about your story; it's kind of like...hmm...you skipped the formal intro on purpose in order to tell it throughout the story. you just kind of got to the point and not worried too much about setting and stuff. ooh, i'm really not making any sense now, am i? anyway, yours is a unique approach to story writing. i like it...lots. so great job! i'm looking forward to your next update.
~J.T.