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3/29/2007 c1 49Toxic.Industrial.Waste
"you fell off your

bike scraped your

knee until no skin was left

and then you said

is that all

that lies inside me?"

What a powerful ending!

I love twisted metaphors. Angst & Truth.


Erica Sky
1/29/2007 c1 16Kiyoko Usagi
I like the last verse "you're there" the best. I liked the images you described and how you worded everything together.
3/6/2005 c1 nick-wordsmith
Hmm, unusual imagery for such ideas... the thoughts themselves arn't origional but this brings it new- life? Anyway needless to say: keep writing.

Stones decay, words lastNick

PS: You should turn these into separate chapters.
1/22/2005 c1 Galadh Niniel
Interesting pieces, your imagery is quite unusual and refreshing, I like the way these are open to many different interpretations.
5/23/2004 c1 21ezyret
wow. this means something different to me than it does to you, I bet! I'd be very curious to hear you interpretation of this poem sometime...
4/19/2004 c1 6L neils
poetry isn't really my thing (school has failed me - i've learned nothing about it) but i like this. it's odd, but so... good. hell, i'm shithouse at reviews.
*btw, i put up a new story i'd like for you to read, 'where to begin'.

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