
3/29/2007 c1
49Toxic.Industrial.Waste
"you fell off your
bike scraped your
knee until no skin was left
and then you said
is that all
that lies inside me?"
What a powerful ending!
I love twisted metaphors. Angst & Truth.
Beautiful.
Erica Sky

"you fell off your
bike scraped your
knee until no skin was left
and then you said
is that all
that lies inside me?"
What a powerful ending!
I love twisted metaphors. Angst & Truth.
Beautiful.
Erica Sky
1/29/2007 c1
16Kiyoko Usagi
I like the last verse "you're there" the best. I liked the images you described and how you worded everything together.

I like the last verse "you're there" the best. I liked the images you described and how you worded everything together.
3/6/2005 c1 nick-wordsmith
Hmm, unusual imagery for such ideas... the thoughts themselves arn't origional but this brings it new- life? Anyway needless to say: keep writing.
Stones decay, words lastNick
PS: You should turn these into separate chapters.
Hmm, unusual imagery for such ideas... the thoughts themselves arn't origional but this brings it new- life? Anyway needless to say: keep writing.
Stones decay, words lastNick
PS: You should turn these into separate chapters.
1/22/2005 c1 Galadh Niniel
Interesting pieces, your imagery is quite unusual and refreshing, I like the way these are open to many different interpretations.
Interesting pieces, your imagery is quite unusual and refreshing, I like the way these are open to many different interpretations.