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6/19/2005 c6 76eden is burning
HeyOh my God, wow Kat! Damn you (in a loving way) because you are just too talented. I really like the use of a varied child's perspective and they way it moves through her life. I think you pin-pointed good bits to write about her, like all the most important times in her life are shown, at all the key ages. And i definitely like the twist at the end, sad as it is! Fantastic as always!Luv ya x
5/30/2005 c6 9Just Jenita
not expecting that.:(~j
5/30/2005 c4 Just Jenita
Nice, it sounds so realistic!I like how you use whilst, not while or some other such word.Let me guess, Jake is the guy she ends up having a crush on/dating/marrying, right?~j
1/22/2005 c6 LoveTakesOver
That's good. I didn't expect the last bit at the end, for it was pretty light-hearted up until the last chapter. The first bit was cool though, 'cos my birthday's November 10th too, same as Louise's!
1/2/2005 c6 29white-clouds
Lovely story. Sad ending. Loved it!
9/22/2004 c1 64chicanerysmile
Holy crap, I can't believe I haven't reviewed this before. Like how you show her at different ages, and her the sudden change in relationship between her and Jake. This last chapter was especially moving. You're an awesome writer! B.
7/19/2004 c6 David Stephen
What can I say. U have lived up to my expectations - no - more than - my expectations once again. I simply LOVE the way you put these two characters together - first introducing them subtley and making them hate each other. I love the way they have become best friends. Wow. From your LLNFT, David. Keep on writing girl! xx :D
7/12/2004 c1 Ffuffy
We all miss it, so this is part of the Gold chronicle thingies? Interesting.
Later,
~Ffuffy~
5/16/2004 c6 28Diana Shore
I like how this story is writen, with the jumps in time. The imaging and dialouge truly puts you in the moment. I'm enjoying watching Louise grow.
5/14/2004 c6 i wanna be a pastry
That was so...there are no words to describe. It was simple and cool. Ahh, I just loved it.
5/9/2004 c1 13Nat Rich
Good job in tieing everything together, what a great story that reminded me iof "the simple things" ...chilhood.
Great work.
-Nat Rich
4/4/2004 c1 1Slightly Bent Halo
i really really like this! i didn't realise it wasn't a real biography until i read ur bio...
looking forward to the sequel!
i like that ending... alot of these things are hard to end, but it's like the end of a chapter in her life, really good!
4/3/2004 c6 35Infinity Plus One
Fecking hell, that was a surprise; in a good way.
4/3/2004 c5 Infinity Plus One
Friends? Wow. He's changed. I like your humour.
4/3/2004 c4 Infinity Plus One
I like the way that you write 'I was x years old each chapter'.
"eggs à la Mum" heh. In my house its 'poached eggs à la daughter' and 'breakfast in bed à la daughter'.
'She looked up from the cooking and greeted me, "Hey Lou, finally decided to join the world?"
I glanced at the digital clock on the silver microwave. "It's only 10:30," I said defensively' - wow. I would probably faint or get DVT if I slept for that long.
That boy sounds a bit like a son of a bitch, but that's only a figure of speech; his mum sounds ok.
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