7/13/2004 c1 16ola
wha!
i read part 2 before this one (heh, don't ask =)
and i loved the continuation. it's almost like a story. really nifty =)
buahh! almost time for lunch break (yup, yup, i'm at work, cuz everything's dead, and there's nothing to do *sigh*)
loved this one. you really do have talent.

4/12/2004 c1 39Laric
Very good trisket. I am impressed I'll take a guess and say this is about your parents or someone? In any case this is a good poem keep it up.

4/10/2004 c1 46Lan Jian
great poem,, i lyk how u ryhme every line

4/10/2004 c1 3Britwitch
Just reviewing you back, like a good author should! ;-)
Loved the last two lines of this, really hit something I could relate to. Have read some of your others and liked them too, maybe try changing your style a little...but then again if you come from a music background then I can see why you chose this style to write in. Definitely has a musical flow to it!
What the heck, I liked it and if you liked it that's all that really matters!
Keep writing!
Britwitch
x

4/10/2004 c1 5Marrin E. Witmer
Not to shabby. Decent flow and you kept the rhyme scheme up. Bravo. Keep writting.

4/10/2004 c1 2miraonawall
This poem reminds me of times of loneliness, helplessness and despair. Trying to trust someone, realizing all along you never expected it to work. I like the rythm and rhyming scheme.
Can't you hear me calling?
Because I still keep falling.
Love it!

4/10/2004 c1 13Bandbingo
i really like how you rhymed in this. i can't rhyme very well so i admire people who can. very good job. i liked how you expressed your emotions so that the reader could feel them, like they were their own. i like.

4/10/2004 c1 Valerie Day
Beautiful poem.