for Concealed7/12/2005 c1 
4Irresistible12345
heyhey! =O omg did the girl DIE? oh no! the last part was so freaky lol i dunno.. u kno the saying "chilled to the bones"? well thats how i felt when i read this:As he walked up the stairs, he heard her soft, weak voice trying to fulfill his request. God please keep her alive, he prayed. I will be in your debt forever. After the quick call, he returned to the basement. The breathy singing had stopped.
“Elena?”
Silence
“Elena?” Terror whipped through him. “Elena?” he called again, pleading God for her to say something.
Silence
but yes anywayss.. this was really good and i was wondering if ur gonna continue this..? or is it like that the girl dies and then it haunts the guy for the rest of his life? lol so yea if ur not gonna continue this then i think u should write more stories.. umm i guess thats it then.. great job!peace \\/
4Irresistible12345heyhey! =O omg did the girl DIE? oh no! the last part was so freaky lol i dunno.. u kno the saying "chilled to the bones"? well thats how i felt when i read this:As he walked up the stairs, he heard her soft, weak voice trying to fulfill his request. God please keep her alive, he prayed. I will be in your debt forever. After the quick call, he returned to the basement. The breathy singing had stopped.
“Elena?”
Silence
“Elena?” Terror whipped through him. “Elena?” he called again, pleading God for her to say something.
Silence
but yes anywayss.. this was really good and i was wondering if ur gonna continue this..? or is it like that the girl dies and then it haunts the guy for the rest of his life? lol so yea if ur not gonna continue this then i think u should write more stories.. umm i guess thats it then.. great job!peace \\/