for Pride Before a Fall8/3/2004 c18 
6tickledblue
wow. suzanna has changed a lot since chapter one. i don't like her as much as i did earlier, but, well, imperfect female characters make great stories (such as this =D) even more interesting and likable. truthfully, i get turned off and stop reading when i come across a "perfect" female lead (you know, one that never makes mistakes), so suzanna is someone...eck, i can't find the right word. refreshing? hm, that doesn't sound right.
anyway, i'd rather have her summon both men and tell the truth, rather than one of them finding out and having all hell break loose. and i think she should end up with westley, but you know what would be good? if he refuses her. *grins* i'm not trying to be evil. it's just that, if he does that, it would make his character even more real. well, you're the author. do whatever you want. just please don't do anything drastic (such as have an assassin appear from nowhere and kill them all with a shotgun, you know?) hehehe... wow. this is probably the longest review i have ever sent. anyway, please update soon!
6tickledbluewow. suzanna has changed a lot since chapter one. i don't like her as much as i did earlier, but, well, imperfect female characters make great stories (such as this =D) even more interesting and likable. truthfully, i get turned off and stop reading when i come across a "perfect" female lead (you know, one that never makes mistakes), so suzanna is someone...eck, i can't find the right word. refreshing? hm, that doesn't sound right.
anyway, i'd rather have her summon both men and tell the truth, rather than one of them finding out and having all hell break loose. and i think she should end up with westley, but you know what would be good? if he refuses her. *grins* i'm not trying to be evil. it's just that, if he does that, it would make his character even more real. well, you're the author. do whatever you want. just please don't do anything drastic (such as have an assassin appear from nowhere and kill them all with a shotgun, you know?) hehehe... wow. this is probably the longest review i have ever sent. anyway, please update soon!
8/3/2004 c12 tickledblue
ah, so she's stuck between two men. poor suze (in a way). and i see that you already know about the age mistake thing, so please just ignore my comment of pointing that out. moving on to next chap... =D
ah, so she's stuck between two men. poor suze (in a way). and i see that you already know about the age mistake thing, so please just ignore my comment of pointing that out. moving on to next chap... =D
8/3/2004 c5 tickledblue
rain is so amusing. and i like the part where she catcalls and gabe figure out that it was her. hehehehe that got me laughing.
rain is so amusing. and i like the part where she catcalls and gabe figure out that it was her. hehehehe that got me laughing.
8/3/2004 c4 tickledblue
i like how you ended this chapter! that was amusing. =) the only thing i don't understand is, if dr. loren is 21, that means he had 11-year-old caroline when he was only ten years old. hm..maybe you'll explain more in the next chapters. or maybe i missed something. okay, moving on to next chap...
i like how you ended this chapter! that was amusing. =) the only thing i don't understand is, if dr. loren is 21, that means he had 11-year-old caroline when he was only ten years old. hm..maybe you'll explain more in the next chapters. or maybe i missed something. okay, moving on to next chap...
8/3/2004 c2 tickledblue
i love this chapter. susanna is so likable, and so is gabe (well, older brothers in stories usually are). i love the setting. hehehe i pretty much love everything about susanna's lifestyle. =)
i love this chapter. susanna is so likable, and so is gabe (well, older brothers in stories usually are). i love the setting. hehehe i pretty much love everything about susanna's lifestyle. =)
8/1/2004 c18 108Kirona of the skies
HOORAY FOR WESTLEY! ^_^ Not hooray that he was sick, but hooray that she hasn't forgotten him completely. ^.^ Sorry I didn't review the last chapter. My computer was being screwy and wouldn't let me. u_u Oh well. I'm still in love with this story. Keep writing OR ELSE! *frothfrothfroth* ^_~
108Kirona of the skiesHOORAY FOR WESTLEY! ^_^ Not hooray that he was sick, but hooray that she hasn't forgotten him completely. ^.^ Sorry I didn't review the last chapter. My computer was being screwy and wouldn't let me. u_u Oh well. I'm still in love with this story. Keep writing OR ELSE! *frothfrothfroth* ^_~
8/1/2004 c18 PhiloNysh
This is almost representative of Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde in Susanna's personality. Jesse and Westley represent each side.
Good story so far!
*dissolves*
This is almost representative of Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde in Susanna's personality. Jesse and Westley represent each side.
Good story so far!
*dissolves*
7/31/2004 c18 7Liriel87
Wow. . . i like Westley better now and i want her to marry him. the question is if/when he comes back from being sick whether or not her mind set will be the same. Gah so selfish. . . she gets two men! Oh well good chapter and update soon!
7Liriel87Wow. . . i like Westley better now and i want her to marry him. the question is if/when he comes back from being sick whether or not her mind set will be the same. Gah so selfish. . . she gets two men! Oh well good chapter and update soon!
7/25/2004 c1 148Moroni of the Mount of Ro
All right! I like your attitude towards the chapters! That's the same in my story . . . People bug me about them being short. But . . . It just woulnd't be right if they were long. I like it so far . . . I'm excited to read more! ^_^
148Moroni of the Mount of RoAll right! I like your attitude towards the chapters! That's the same in my story . . . People bug me about them being short. But . . . It just woulnd't be right if they were long. I like it so far . . . I'm excited to read more! ^_^
7/25/2004 c16 108Kirona of the skies
Rain is SO right. She needs to get her brain to shut up. ^_^;; And I'm still rooting for Westley. ^_~
108Kirona of the skiesRain is SO right. She needs to get her brain to shut up. ^_^;; And I'm still rooting for Westley. ^_~
7/25/2004 c15 Kirona of the skies
Wow. Usually in a story like this, I don't know who I want the girl to end up with, but I am SO rooting for Westley. *continues to read*
Wow. Usually in a story like this, I don't know who I want the girl to end up with, but I am SO rooting for Westley. *continues to read*
7/25/2004 c14 Kirona of the skies
GAH! THE SUSPENSE! THE SUSPENSE! MUST...KEEP...READING! *scrambles on to next chapter*
GAH! THE SUSPENSE! THE SUSPENSE! MUST...KEEP...READING! *scrambles on to next chapter*
7/25/2004 c12 Kirona of the skies
Aw. Jesse's different. That makes me sad. u_u I liked him. Not enough outgoing types in this story. Nothing wrong with that, o'course, but he just added variety...oh well. Now she can be with Westley. XD Keep going! ^_~
Aw. Jesse's different. That makes me sad. u_u I liked him. Not enough outgoing types in this story. Nothing wrong with that, o'course, but he just added variety...oh well. Now she can be with Westley. XD Keep going! ^_~
7/24/2004 c11 Kirona of the skies
o_O Wow. Short but powerful. I am SO glad that there's plenty of chapters I haven't gotten around to reading yet...XD
o_O Wow. Short but powerful. I am SO glad that there's plenty of chapters I haven't gotten around to reading yet...XD