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6/5/2004 c1 CW-nerd-12
To give you a serious tip about writing: You should try SHOWING us things instead of just telling us them. Don't just tell us your sad, show us things about your sadness. Don't rely so much on YOUR emotional connection with a piece, let the reader make their own emotional connections. That's the first trick I was taught in Creative Writing, and it actually made my poetry good!
6/5/2004 c1 Bronwen Ackeley
Beautiful...simply beautiful in everyway!:) i read this and it felt like you've read my mind!:) you really do know how to create poems and such that touch a wide variety of audiences and that's a talent not may people have! Keep it up!
love,
~Dark Angel
4/21/2004 c1 Jenn
i really liked it! u remind me of my friend amber (indigotear)a little bit!
i hope that by the last line u didn't mean u were gonna kill urself!
4/10/2004 c1 59Unfairy
and i thought my life sucked...
4/8/2004 c1 Keris-Rain
hey! omg that was sad... be happy. hey i got ur email and yea i did write back but im not gonna say here so every1 can see lol. but seriously i love this poem. great job!
~Kaitlyn
4/6/2004 c1 1Gwuinivyre
That is depressing in a way. But its very good though.
Gwuinny

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