for Save Me II7/18/2004 c1 DarkDepression
That was awsome! And thank you for the review ^_^
That was awsome! And thank you for the review ^_^
7/13/2004 c1 
16ola
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*blinks*
wow. that was... great, for lack of a better word. i was never any good with poetry, and i wish i could write somehting half as good. =)
i liked the message of the poem as well! yay! =)
16ola...
*blinks*
wow. that was... great, for lack of a better word. i was never any good with poetry, and i wish i could write somehting half as good. =)
i liked the message of the poem as well! yay! =)
4/15/2004 c1 KaraHH
wow this is a very deep. You have a great thing going.
wow this is a very deep. You have a great thing going.
4/12/2004 c1 39Laric
Nice I like a good continuation of the previous poem. Keep writing I'll keep reading.
39LaricNice I like a good continuation of the previous poem. Keep writing I'll keep reading.
4/11/2004 c1 Milo
this is really nice iv never read anything like it the person who wrote it has a gift. I say keep writing these fantastic storys.
this is really nice iv never read anything like it the person who wrote it has a gift. I say keep writing these fantastic storys.
4/11/2004 c1 Rick
It sucks i dont see what every one sees in it i say you need writing lessons.
It sucks i dont see what every one sees in it i say you need writing lessons.
4/11/2004 c1 10Drydian
I like this poem best out of your writings. When you rhyme here, it doesn't sound as forced as some of your other poems do. This one flows much nicer. I really like this part...
'You held me back
You told me all these things I lacked'
and
'I don't need you to save me
I already set myself free. '
Those lines jumped out at me when I was reading through. I like how they sound. You do a good job of putting words together, maybe you don't have to make your next poem rhyme so much? If you do, don't force it. You should be able to read your poem out loud and have it not sound choppy in its rhyming. Good work, keep writing!
10DrydianI like this poem best out of your writings. When you rhyme here, it doesn't sound as forced as some of your other poems do. This one flows much nicer. I really like this part...
'You held me back
You told me all these things I lacked'
and
'I don't need you to save me
I already set myself free. '
Those lines jumped out at me when I was reading through. I like how they sound. You do a good job of putting words together, maybe you don't have to make your next poem rhyme so much? If you do, don't force it. You should be able to read your poem out loud and have it not sound choppy in its rhyming. Good work, keep writing!
4/10/2004 c1 4fines piperis
Yea...I'm just here to ask you to please stop the spamming? You seem to have given the same identical rather meaningless comment to a great many entries...
4fines piperisYea...I'm just here to ask you to please stop the spamming? You seem to have given the same identical rather meaningless comment to a great many entries...
4/10/2004 c1 Bloody Wolf
Another nice one here. There's a few grammer mistakes, but hell, we all make those every now and then. Just pointing it out, cause sometimes I miss 'em in my own shit. I do like yer stuff though, and keep writin'.
Another nice one here. There's a few grammer mistakes, but hell, we all make those every now and then. Just pointing it out, cause sometimes I miss 'em in my own shit. I do like yer stuff though, and keep writin'.
4/10/2004 c1 13Bandbingo
not as good as the first one. you need to go back and check your spelling in some parts and your wording in one part confused me a little. once again i like how you can rhyme your poems and good job keep writing.
13Bandbingonot as good as the first one. you need to go back and check your spelling in some parts and your wording in one part confused me a little. once again i like how you can rhyme your poems and good job keep writing.
4/10/2004 c1 136Anat Qetesh
wow. lovely. I like this one better than save me (1) but i like the rhmn and word use. good use of words. Easy to relate too. Thanks for r/r my things too. keep it up ur realy good!
136Anat Qeteshwow. lovely. I like this one better than save me (1) but i like the rhmn and word use. good use of words. Easy to relate too. Thanks for r/r my things too. keep it up ur realy good!
4/10/2004 c1 Haz Almighty
hi, thanks for reviewing ma story ment a lot, so i thought i wud return it, i read a couple of others before this and i think they are all gd, why dnt u try a poem that introduces differnet stanzas and change the structure abit, quite depressing at the start but then gives u hope at the end. Nice flow so its easy to read. I would recommend not ryming every sentence but u seem popular so what do i know! thnx bi x
hi, thanks for reviewing ma story ment a lot, so i thought i wud return it, i read a couple of others before this and i think they are all gd, why dnt u try a poem that introduces differnet stanzas and change the structure abit, quite depressing at the start but then gives u hope at the end. Nice flow so its easy to read. I would recommend not ryming every sentence but u seem popular so what do i know! thnx bi x