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9/13/2004 c1 120androanon
It's perfect. You captured just the right amount of emotion in the words, and you can feel the needing and screaming to get out.
8/28/2004 c1 3Stranger Than Fiction
I really loved this. I envy you so much for your ability at writing poetry. Very nice, keep up the good work.
5/23/2004 c1 13lostontheroof
Great job! I love the first two lines. Keep writing!
5/19/2004 c1 5Ethra Esme
"Life has no synonyms, for practicality’s sake"
"An unborn baby begging for a chance at life"
I love this I love this I love this.
Eth
PS- Thanks for the review! Argh! The pain of realization! *twitches*
5/2/2004 c1 31Lily Elise
wow...just, wow...I thought it was really deep.
4/28/2004 c1 10Violet Blues
"Life has no synonyms, for practicality’s sake
There’s nothing close to human, with our
Angst and depression, our poetic aspirations
Caged feelings, suppressed acceptance"
My fav. part. This was a beautiful poem!
-Violet
4/22/2004 c1 48Morcirith
You really pulled off the I'm-writing-a-poem-about-a-poem thing. I think that maybe I am all of those people you described. SQUEAK.
4/11/2004 c1 48Silent Laughter
the repetitive lines were great at tying the whol thing together. it could almost be some Evanescense song... it's kind of deep and dark like that. the ideas were powerful, as always, and the contrast was great, as was the rhythm. you rock!
~*~SJ~*~
4/10/2004 c1 74LordK
Brilliant. That was deep. Impressive. Wow... it's so eye-opening. I've always loved your unique perspective, and how you express it so powerfully through poetry. That's such a gift, or talent, or however you choose to look at it. Wonderful. You're feelings manifest themselves so... vivdly. And interestingly. Incredible, incredible, incredible. I liked the refrain, it was used so well. I also absolutely love the third-to-last stanza. It was great how you progressed from physical prisons to emotional and mental prisons. Incredibly worded and concieved. Wonderful
4/9/2004 c1 89lalamushu
great poem
4/9/2004 c1 58floorcollision
brilliant- you never fail to impress me. this time you've gone way over the top- this is possibly the best way my feeligns could have been put into words, especially now. thank you- you are truly gifted.
i love this poem- on my fave stories list!:)
4/9/2004 c1 21dancingwiththedead
I really love this! It flows incredibly well, and I exspecially love some of your word choices.
"Life has no synonyms, for practicality’s sake
There’s nothing close to human, with our
Angst and depression, our poetic aspirations
Caged feelings, suppressed acceptance
Needing,
Screaming
To be released."
Def, my favorite part.

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