
11/19/2004 c2
1passionate effluence
Very interesting story! Mara is a great character, and I like the mysterious Horatio. Thanks for reading my story. I hope you continue yours. =) take care.

Very interesting story! Mara is a great character, and I like the mysterious Horatio. Thanks for reading my story. I hope you continue yours. =) take care.
4/11/2004 c1
2March
This story seems off to a great start! You've set up Mara nicely and I can really visualize Roald's character-good job on that point. It was great that he could read her well enough to ask her what she'd rather be doing. Your summary sounds intriguing, so you'd better update :) I'm wondering, though, if Gabriel can't force Mara into a marriage, than why bring it up at all when he knows she'd take the order badly? This is a great start, please continue it!

This story seems off to a great start! You've set up Mara nicely and I can really visualize Roald's character-good job on that point. It was great that he could read her well enough to ask her what she'd rather be doing. Your summary sounds intriguing, so you'd better update :) I'm wondering, though, if Gabriel can't force Mara into a marriage, than why bring it up at all when he knows she'd take the order badly? This is a great start, please continue it!