for Gunslave: Raven's Story4/16/2004 c1 Cidkuneraze
Weapon, here's some news for you...
Truths:
#1- Wow, I may be wanting a tiny piece of fame, so sue me. Everyone has some fault, yours is being to quick to judge things or people, without knowing them.
#2- I may want a bit of fame, who cares? Besides, you say I want to 'impress' my friends, unfortunately, they were 'impressed' at my stories before they were even on the internet.
#3- Quit straining yourself, you're too high-strung. And as for the spell-checking advice, I already used one before I put this chapter out. I suggest you take your own advice unless you meant to call me a 'tool'.
#4- I am updating this story today and unless you get the guts to get yourself your own account on this website, you won't be reviewing it without reading.
#5- Mine and your reviews do not count towards the goal because I'm simply trying to fix my writing style while you use so-called 'constructive criticism' to keep me from completing my stories, and to this i say: "You are the Weakest Link, goodbye."
Peace out-
Cederick Alabaster Kuneraze
Weapon, here's some news for you...
Truths:
#1- Wow, I may be wanting a tiny piece of fame, so sue me. Everyone has some fault, yours is being to quick to judge things or people, without knowing them.
#2- I may want a bit of fame, who cares? Besides, you say I want to 'impress' my friends, unfortunately, they were 'impressed' at my stories before they were even on the internet.
#3- Quit straining yourself, you're too high-strung. And as for the spell-checking advice, I already used one before I put this chapter out. I suggest you take your own advice unless you meant to call me a 'tool'.
#4- I am updating this story today and unless you get the guts to get yourself your own account on this website, you won't be reviewing it without reading.
#5- Mine and your reviews do not count towards the goal because I'm simply trying to fix my writing style while you use so-called 'constructive criticism' to keep me from completing my stories, and to this i say: "You are the Weakest Link, goodbye."
Peace out-
Cederick Alabaster Kuneraze
4/16/2004 c1 Weapon
Ha! Use a spellcheck, tool. Or read over your own work. You don't need 5 people to tell you the same thing before you update. Plus, I don't see anything where it talks about grammar or spelling in your review to yourself. You just want people to say how great of a writer you are so you can brag to all your friends about how cool you are. You make me sick.
But you do have a major description problem: There isn't any. And it looks like you wrote this in ten minutes. Terrible. So, there's some constructive criticism for you and counting your two reviews to yourself, you now have 5. You can update now. LOL.
I was right by the way: You had to defend yourself and there was no way you could just sit back and let someone be right. Egotistical moron.
~^*Weapon*^~
P.S. No one is "drooling" over your story. You're not good enough to deserve that reaction.
Ha! Use a spellcheck, tool. Or read over your own work. You don't need 5 people to tell you the same thing before you update. Plus, I don't see anything where it talks about grammar or spelling in your review to yourself. You just want people to say how great of a writer you are so you can brag to all your friends about how cool you are. You make me sick.
But you do have a major description problem: There isn't any. And it looks like you wrote this in ten minutes. Terrible. So, there's some constructive criticism for you and counting your two reviews to yourself, you now have 5. You can update now. LOL.
I was right by the way: You had to defend yourself and there was no way you could just sit back and let someone be right. Egotistical moron.
~^*Weapon*^~
P.S. No one is "drooling" over your story. You're not good enough to deserve that reaction.
4/15/2004 c1 Cid Kuneraze
Im sorry for the mistake, weapon, but apparently, you didn't read my post correctly, i require reviews bofore updating so that i know what grammar, description problems i have in my writings, because i have all of my stories already in handwriting but i need to get advice on how to improve my writing. isn't that what Fictionpress is all about? Sorry for the misinterpretation.
Peace out-
Cederick Alabaster Kuneraze
Im sorry for the mistake, weapon, but apparently, you didn't read my post correctly, i require reviews bofore updating so that i know what grammar, description problems i have in my writings, because i have all of my stories already in handwriting but i need to get advice on how to improve my writing. isn't that what Fictionpress is all about? Sorry for the misinterpretation.
Peace out-
Cederick Alabaster Kuneraze
4/15/2004 c1 Weapon
In truth, I didn't read the story because I read the reviews first and saw the one you had written.
You want five reviews before you update? You're horrible. You have one reader, why not satisfy him/her instead of letting your story stagnate while you wait for kind words from strangers? If you're writing for your own ego instead of trying to become better (and that is what reviews are for after all) then get off the net and don't waste anybody's time.
And I'll KNOW you write for your ego if you come back with another review and try to defend yourself. This place isn't a message board. I don't care how good of a writer you may be, if you write for these purposes, you're not a writer: You're a fool.
~^*Weapon*^~
In truth, I didn't read the story because I read the reviews first and saw the one you had written.
You want five reviews before you update? You're horrible. You have one reader, why not satisfy him/her instead of letting your story stagnate while you wait for kind words from strangers? If you're writing for your own ego instead of trying to become better (and that is what reviews are for after all) then get off the net and don't waste anybody's time.
And I'll KNOW you write for your ego if you come back with another review and try to defend yourself. This place isn't a message board. I don't care how good of a writer you may be, if you write for these purposes, you're not a writer: You're a fool.
~^*Weapon*^~
4/15/2004 c1 
5strenghtheningstorm
Good story I must say.
But you did want the truth.
Your story lacks descriptive words.
More action words would make this story better.
5strenghtheningstormGood story I must say.
But you did want the truth.
Your story lacks descriptive words.
More action words would make this story better.
4/14/2004 c1 3Cederick Kuneraze
This is a treat for everyone to drool over while I wait for more reviews for my stories, as normal, I have a review requirement before I update, 5+ reviews for each chapter. Please, i want to know how much you like my stories, otherwise I would be wasting my time writing, I want everyone to tell me whether or not they like them.
Peace out-
Cederick Alabaster Kuneraze
3Cederick KunerazeThis is a treat for everyone to drool over while I wait for more reviews for my stories, as normal, I have a review requirement before I update, 5+ reviews for each chapter. Please, i want to know how much you like my stories, otherwise I would be wasting my time writing, I want everyone to tell me whether or not they like them.
Peace out-
Cederick Alabaster Kuneraze