
6/26/2005 c1
2thewindcriesmary
Your story was...interesting to say the least. However, I found the bad grammar throughout the entire story to be very distracting. I would suggest having someone proofread your stories before putting them up. Also, a spell check would help in some places.

Your story was...interesting to say the least. However, I found the bad grammar throughout the entire story to be very distracting. I would suggest having someone proofread your stories before putting them up. Also, a spell check would help in some places.
5/15/2004 c2
22Kaxanthedragon
No dissing here, just praising. Very interesting. You just know when to stop a story. Keeps the reader reading, or at least wanting to read more. TTYL.
-Red

No dissing here, just praising. Very interesting. You just know when to stop a story. Keeps the reader reading, or at least wanting to read more. TTYL.
-Red
5/15/2004 c1 Kaxanthedragon
I'm speechless... That dragon... It kinda reminds me of Draco... Is it him?
I'm speechless... That dragon... It kinda reminds me of Draco... Is it him?
5/2/2004 c1 Tina
Really nice idea i think i'm going to end up liking Joey and Ilsa throughout the story but not sure anyways i like it please -continue-
Really nice idea i think i'm going to end up liking Joey and Ilsa throughout the story but not sure anyways i like it please -continue-
5/1/2004 c1
7Valiant Valkyrie
ah...fix it, I'm not reading it if I have to keep scrolling back and forth!11!1!1!11!oneone!1!1one!

ah...fix it, I'm not reading it if I have to keep scrolling back and forth!11!1!1!11!oneone!1!1one!
5/1/2004 c1 Blackdrazon darned 1 review per chapter rules
I forgot to mention that I loved the computer describing Matt when he entered. One of the most inventive ways of describing a character ever. I love it! Keep up the good work!
I forgot to mention that I loved the computer describing Matt when he entered. One of the most inventive ways of describing a character ever. I love it! Keep up the good work!
5/1/2004 c1 Black Drazon
This is pretty interesting stuff, if you can manage the nine characters effectively, I think we will not be disappointed.
I'm glad that no one followed the dragon back in to the cave immediately. Their response is better the way it is.
A frew punctuation problems, and a few paragraphs with names where their should have been pronouns (eg: "Monica looked up above to see the large reptile flying over head. Monica let out a small scream as she covered her head for protection."), but it's nothing I'm not used to, I still do it. A lot.
This is pretty interesting stuff, if you can manage the nine characters effectively, I think we will not be disappointed.
I'm glad that no one followed the dragon back in to the cave immediately. Their response is better the way it is.
A frew punctuation problems, and a few paragraphs with names where their should have been pronouns (eg: "Monica looked up above to see the large reptile flying over head. Monica let out a small scream as she covered her head for protection."), but it's nothing I'm not used to, I still do it. A lot.
5/1/2004 c1 Kristen
Intresting i like it! I can't wait for the next chapter!
Intresting i like it! I can't wait for the next chapter!