for Rivulets6/25/2004 c1 
127Eirien
This is perfectly written, a wonderful poem. No word is superfluous, they all add to an overpowering effect. The imagery used to describe the cuts/ scars is very inventive, especially the "freshly dug graves". The last two linesn are a great climax to the poem, very effective.
127EirienThis is perfectly written, a wonderful poem. No word is superfluous, they all add to an overpowering effect. The imagery used to describe the cuts/ scars is very inventive, especially the "freshly dug graves". The last two linesn are a great climax to the poem, very effective.
5/8/2004 c1 A Beautiful Nightmare
The last line suprised me... and the the line "Like freshly dug graves" was very original... well done...
The last line suprised me... and the the line "Like freshly dug graves" was very original... well done...