for you're not my hero any more5/5/2004 c1 
45rhyne
Interesting... Very powerful emotions behind this poem... Any advice? The only advice I have to give is to formulate your feelings better... It's the order in which you state your feelings... Maybe your poem would have more effectiveness if you'd started with the way you felt before you were "rejected," build up the happy feelings (Or whatever) before leading to the heartwrenching incident of betrayal. Am I making any sense? Sometimes I ramble... Ah... Well, in any case, your poem has a good start. I love the end!
45rhyneInteresting... Very powerful emotions behind this poem... Any advice? The only advice I have to give is to formulate your feelings better... It's the order in which you state your feelings... Maybe your poem would have more effectiveness if you'd started with the way you felt before you were "rejected," build up the happy feelings (Or whatever) before leading to the heartwrenching incident of betrayal. Am I making any sense? Sometimes I ramble... Ah... Well, in any case, your poem has a good start. I love the end!