for The Attic6/23/2013 c7 anonymus
Hell, she doubted if they
she-I
Hell, she doubted if they
she-I
6/23/2013 c6 anonymus
while in was in the
-while I was in the
while in was in the
-while I was in the
6/23/2013 c6 anonymus
when I person was
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when I person was
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6/23/2013 c4 anonymus
TYPO
I shoved hi off
hi-him
TYPO
I shoved hi off
hi-him
6/23/2013 c1 anonymus
hi,
just started reading
(interesting as far as i have read)
i dont know if you want typo correction? (especially since it is already compleated)
but as long as there is no obvious hint that you dont want them ...
TYPO:
"have married have married"
2*"have married"
But then again, he hadn't really been paying attention when he left that evening
third persone -third person (I-he)
hi,
just started reading
(interesting as far as i have read)
i dont know if you want typo correction? (especially since it is already compleated)
but as long as there is no obvious hint that you dont want them ...
TYPO:
"have married have married"
2*"have married"
But then again, he hadn't really been paying attention when he left that evening
third persone -third person (I-he)
6/13/2013 c1 Wickedforlife
Hot scottish guy, two words ; DAVID TENNANT!
Hot scottish guy, two words ; DAVID TENNANT!
5/30/2013 c23 Guest
It was a rather anticlimactic ending, and I really wish there were more Iden - Aysel moments but...
Great story :) Iden's behavior was so cute! The way he acted around and about things concerning Aysel! Especially how he would call her "miss" and act all old fashioned.
It was a rather anticlimactic ending, and I really wish there were more Iden - Aysel moments but...
Great story :) Iden's behavior was so cute! The way he acted around and about things concerning Aysel! Especially how he would call her "miss" and act all old fashioned.
4/12/2013 c23 Dominique Diane
Darwin a vampire Daddy?! Oh my God! My first vampire story, awesome by the way! I was on the edge, eating my nails! Love it! And Idean, yeah! Finally they're together!
Regards,
Diane Potter.
Darwin a vampire Daddy?! Oh my God! My first vampire story, awesome by the way! I was on the edge, eating my nails! Love it! And Idean, yeah! Finally they're together!
Regards,
Diane Potter.
2/28/2013 c6 Nymi08
lol, poor Fayer. These past few chapters have been good. I have no idea how this story will end up, so I'm looking forward to finding out -.
lol, poor Fayer. These past few chapters have been good. I have no idea how this story will end up, so I'm looking forward to finding out -.
2/27/2013 c3 Nymi08
I forgot to review last chapter. opps. But I still really like this story. Sometimes the first person could be cleaned up a bit, but it all keeps playing in my head like a movie, and each time it moves between the characters perspectives. I really like how you are able to write in their different styles, or way of thinking. It keeps it interesting. I also find that I'm not annoyed at Aysel, which usually happens with main female characters. I was worried (might still be) that with Darwin and Fayer showing up that this will turn into a story of who can win her affections... I hope that doesn't happen, but who knows, you might be able to do it well. Or maybe those two would end up together. lol, oh how I love my guy pairings, but only if it makes sense. I think I'm going to find a good story about a gay couple after this one. But I'll stick with this topic. Good Chapter you have here! I'm looking forward to reading it all! -
I forgot to review last chapter. opps. But I still really like this story. Sometimes the first person could be cleaned up a bit, but it all keeps playing in my head like a movie, and each time it moves between the characters perspectives. I really like how you are able to write in their different styles, or way of thinking. It keeps it interesting. I also find that I'm not annoyed at Aysel, which usually happens with main female characters. I was worried (might still be) that with Darwin and Fayer showing up that this will turn into a story of who can win her affections... I hope that doesn't happen, but who knows, you might be able to do it well. Or maybe those two would end up together. lol, oh how I love my guy pairings, but only if it makes sense. I think I'm going to find a good story about a gay couple after this one. But I'll stick with this topic. Good Chapter you have here! I'm looking forward to reading it all! -
2/27/2013 c1 Nymi08
I'm looking forward to seeing how this turns out! I like the Characters so far. I noticed a couple of errors, but I'm sure that's already been printed out by now. Even still, this is much better than most of the Young Adult/Teen books out there. Kudos!
I'm looking forward to seeing how this turns out! I like the Characters so far. I noticed a couple of errors, but I'm sure that's already been printed out by now. Even still, this is much better than most of the Young Adult/Teen books out there. Kudos!
2/10/2013 c1 Guest
Hot Scottish guy...do you watch doctor who?Have you seen David tennet?
Hot Scottish guy...do you watch doctor who?Have you seen David tennet?
2/6/2013 c7 
19Alaeryel
Bloody Hell-I do not think I am going to survive this story Best-I love your humor, I love this story and I love your writing-PRICELESS!
19AlaeryelBloody Hell-I do not think I am going to survive this story Best-I love your humor, I love this story and I love your writing-PRICELESS!
2/6/2013 c6 Alaeryel
OMG! This chapter was too funny-as well as the last two/three others-I don't think I have laughed so hard in a long time-THANK YOU! This story is just way too good!
OMG! This chapter was too funny-as well as the last two/three others-I don't think I have laughed so hard in a long time-THANK YOU! This story is just way too good!
2/6/2013 c1 Alaeryel
Very interesting story and I love the back drop on the original family upfront and immediately-that doesn't usually happen so soon into the story but it makes things easier to understand without detracting from the rest of the mystery and twists an author writes into it and your writing is done very very well.
Very interesting story and I love the back drop on the original family upfront and immediately-that doesn't usually happen so soon into the story but it makes things easier to understand without detracting from the rest of the mystery and twists an author writes into it and your writing is done very very well.