for The Attic6/9/2010 c23 ManicMango
Hm...I liked the story, but it feels like it ended too fast. The ending just didn't feel right...I dunno...anyways, good story
Hm...I liked the story, but it feels like it ended too fast. The ending just didn't feel right...I dunno...anyways, good story
5/29/2010 c23 bobby5155
Great non whimpy vampires, but I felt like Aysel and Iden's 'relationship' wasn't developed enough for this to qualify under the romance genre.
Great non whimpy vampires, but I felt like Aysel and Iden's 'relationship' wasn't developed enough for this to qualify under the romance genre.
5/21/2010 c23 
1Me102
heey! i just found this story and finished it in a few days. i really like it! i also wanted to tell you, i made some cute little cartoonish version of the characters in this story. if you want, i can email them to you. you can email at if you want. :)
1Me102heey! i just found this story and finished it in a few days. i really like it! i also wanted to tell you, i made some cute little cartoonish version of the characters in this story. if you want, i can email them to you. you can email at if you want. :)
5/16/2010 c23 Hidden Flowers
I'm so pleased! The ending was so totally AYSEL, that I was delighted. I did love this well. Will there be a sequel?
I'm so pleased! The ending was so totally AYSEL, that I was delighted. I did love this well. Will there be a sequel?
5/16/2010 c2 Frozen.by.Sloth
Hey.
This started out really interesting. It's a very different perspective from most things dealing with vampires and you have an easy-to-follow style of writing, everything flows along beautifully.
Except; in the first chapter there's a paragraph in which you switch from first person to third when Iden is wondering why hadn't he noticed the newcomers before. I'm guessing it's a mistake, but it's a bit distracting.
I really like the story, it has a lot of potential, and it's really entertaining so far. I can't wait to find out more about the family, him and the rest of the vampires.
Oh, one more thing. When you switch POV's you tend to run through the same time-line with both characters. Though it's told from a different perspective, I find it a bit redundant to read the same thing twice. It shouldn't be hard to incorporate and fit things so that they tell their own stories that tie up the times, not re-tell them.
Anyway, great work.
Thank you for sharing, I'm loving it.
Enjoy~
Hey.
This started out really interesting. It's a very different perspective from most things dealing with vampires and you have an easy-to-follow style of writing, everything flows along beautifully.
Except; in the first chapter there's a paragraph in which you switch from first person to third when Iden is wondering why hadn't he noticed the newcomers before. I'm guessing it's a mistake, but it's a bit distracting.
I really like the story, it has a lot of potential, and it's really entertaining so far. I can't wait to find out more about the family, him and the rest of the vampires.
Oh, one more thing. When you switch POV's you tend to run through the same time-line with both characters. Though it's told from a different perspective, I find it a bit redundant to read the same thing twice. It shouldn't be hard to incorporate and fit things so that they tell their own stories that tie up the times, not re-tell them.
Anyway, great work.
Thank you for sharing, I'm loving it.
Enjoy~
5/5/2010 c23 1SomeCowgirl
Hello!
Well I really enjoyed this story, the ending wasn't quite... what I had expected but it was still good nevertheless.
1SomeCowgirlHello!
Well I really enjoyed this story, the ending wasn't quite... what I had expected but it was still good nevertheless.
4/30/2010 c1 9Lexodus
OMFG a real vampire! THANK FUCK!
I'm sorry. It's just so emotional. I never thought this day would come again... :')
9LexodusOMFG a real vampire! THANK FUCK!
I'm sorry. It's just so emotional. I never thought this day would come again... :')
4/29/2010 c23 SpotWillRuleTheWorld
It's been awhile, but thanks for finishing it. You don;t know how sad I am when a good writter wont finish a sory, especially so close to the end.
THANKS!
It's been awhile, but thanks for finishing it. You don;t know how sad I am when a good writter wont finish a sory, especially so close to the end.
THANKS!
4/28/2010 c23 6Coraline De Rosen
REally great story! Definatly not generic and overused, but truly unique. I loved the view changes and character descriptions, though the ending battle and end in general seemed a bit hurried. I would have liked to see a continuation, or perhaps even a sequel to this story. The character of Aysel and her and Iden's love interest seems like an interesting plot line to continue.
I hope you continue this story, as I would hate to have it end here.
6Coraline De RosenREally great story! Definatly not generic and overused, but truly unique. I loved the view changes and character descriptions, though the ending battle and end in general seemed a bit hurried. I would have liked to see a continuation, or perhaps even a sequel to this story. The character of Aysel and her and Iden's love interest seems like an interesting plot line to continue.
I hope you continue this story, as I would hate to have it end here.
4/27/2010 c23 xoxo anne
I really liked this stoy. :)
but I would have liked to see more between
Aysel and Iden though.
XD
I really liked this stoy. :)
but I would have liked to see more between
Aysel and Iden though.
XD
4/27/2010 c23 1Slightly Bent Halo
ok, i don't have time to read this right now.. and i see THE END! :O
but, i needed to tell you.. that i've thought about this story a lot since the whole twilight hysteria.. and i always thought how much better your story is, and how it's my fave teen vampire story i've read! :)
so when i got the chapter emailed to me, i just had to come here quickly and let you know.. i love your story! :D
1Slightly Bent Halook, i don't have time to read this right now.. and i see THE END! :O
but, i needed to tell you.. that i've thought about this story a lot since the whole twilight hysteria.. and i always thought how much better your story is, and how it's my fave teen vampire story i've read! :)
so when i got the chapter emailed to me, i just had to come here quickly and let you know.. i love your story! :D
4/27/2010 c23 MK16
Ahh no!
It's finished?
I hope there is an epilogue or a sequel?
The last chapter was extremely rushed and cliched
it would have been better to stretch it out way more
and even develop aysel and idens relationship
and it was a tad unbelievable that the parents were all happy
about her changing
it's a really good story but I get the ending didn't pull through
like you just wanted to rid urself of this story
hope u continue it!
Ahh no!
It's finished?
I hope there is an epilogue or a sequel?
The last chapter was extremely rushed and cliched
it would have been better to stretch it out way more
and even develop aysel and idens relationship
and it was a tad unbelievable that the parents were all happy
about her changing
it's a really good story but I get the ending didn't pull through
like you just wanted to rid urself of this story
hope u continue it!
4/27/2010 c23 Bubbly Girl
Yes! You finished the story! It had the PERFECY ending! :) Beautiful work! :)
Peace, Love and Happiness! :)
~Bubbly Girl
Yes! You finished the story! It had the PERFECY ending! :) Beautiful work! :)
Peace, Love and Happiness! :)
~Bubbly Girl
4/27/2010 c23 11KT-ImmortalIncarnate
Good ending! ^_^ Now fix your spelling mistakes! xD ^_^
I saw lots of em, "I threw my arms around her nd embraced her tightly" Should be "I threw my arms around her and embraced her tightly."
^_^
KT{ImmortalIncarnate}
11KT-ImmortalIncarnateGood ending! ^_^ Now fix your spelling mistakes! xD ^_^
I saw lots of em, "I threw my arms around her nd embraced her tightly" Should be "I threw my arms around her and embraced her tightly."
^_^
KT{ImmortalIncarnate}