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12Tomako Briefs
This was freakin' awesome! O_O I LOVE YOU. Please, oh please, write and write and write on this! It's the best of your stories so far, I think. Except maybe The Other Side of the Mirror (which is also totally awesome).
You're the best!
12Tomako BriefsThis was freakin' awesome! O_O I LOVE YOU. Please, oh please, write and write and write on this! It's the best of your stories so far, I think. Except maybe The Other Side of the Mirror (which is also totally awesome).
You're the best!
5/7/2004 c2 1Draliane
Oh, oh vampires, they're great. I like how the story starts out, the different prespectives. But this chapter was so funny. Now that I think about it, I want a vampire to fall through the ceiling. *Smiles* Well, bye!
1DralianeOh, oh vampires, they're great. I like how the story starts out, the different prespectives. But this chapter was so funny. Now that I think about it, I want a vampire to fall through the ceiling. *Smiles* Well, bye!
5/7/2004 c2 7Lightness
sheezus... those crazy scot-kids are pretty mean. poor aysel.
the bathroom incident was wonderful. lol. it was great. the characters reactions to the events were very entertaining.
although... i was kinda surprised that the parents (and wes) didnt notice anything.
darwin kinda came outta nowhere but eh.. its all good.
anyway. great chapter. you should update soon.
7Lightnesssheezus... those crazy scot-kids are pretty mean. poor aysel.
the bathroom incident was wonderful. lol. it was great. the characters reactions to the events were very entertaining.
although... i was kinda surprised that the parents (and wes) didnt notice anything.
darwin kinda came outta nowhere but eh.. its all good.
anyway. great chapter. you should update soon.
5/7/2004 c2 2Mystified
This is great! I love Aysel's personality -believable, but amusing. I don't generally go for vampire stories, but I'll definitely be checking back on this one. When you can make someone like a different genre of story, that shows talent. = )
2MystifiedThis is great! I love Aysel's personality -believable, but amusing. I don't generally go for vampire stories, but I'll definitely be checking back on this one. When you can make someone like a different genre of story, that shows talent. = )
5/7/2004 c1 7Lightness
dude, youre a wonderful author, but youve really outdone yourself with this story. i LOVE it.
the introduction was a little confusing but it all made sense after the first paragraph. i really like the way you overlapped some of the incident and told the story from both points of view without it making it seem odd or abrupt. very nicely written.
the characters are so much fun. very real and relateable.
and oh... by the by, i have to disagree with you about scotland having no decent boys. sean biggerstaff is one hot kid.
7Lightnessdude, youre a wonderful author, but youve really outdone yourself with this story. i LOVE it.
the introduction was a little confusing but it all made sense after the first paragraph. i really like the way you overlapped some of the incident and told the story from both points of view without it making it seem odd or abrupt. very nicely written.
the characters are so much fun. very real and relateable.
and oh... by the by, i have to disagree with you about scotland having no decent boys. sean biggerstaff is one hot kid.
5/7/2004 c2 Midge
It's very good. ^_^ The chapters are a little long though. Maybe you should break them up and make them smaller...? I don't know. It's a lot of writing on one page. Kinda gets tedious after a while.
It's very good. ^_^ The chapters are a little long though. Maybe you should break them up and make them smaller...? I don't know. It's a lot of writing on one page. Kinda gets tedious after a while.