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10/8/2004 c1 54Jenna Mann
Nice.
5/21/2004 c1 368EWindheim
Oh Matthew...this is so touching and emotional. I personally think, that no matter how hard we try, we can never rid ourselves of the pain of letting go. We can repress it or hide it within ourselves, but it stays with us always. You captured that well here. The rhyming on the third to last stanza is a bit off, but (as always), you did a nice job my friend.
~Hawke
5/12/2004 c1 I Found Myself At 24
I really liked this one. You were right about the first stanza - it was really good. Although I think the rest was just as good as well! :)
5/11/2004 c1 19freethephoenix
How?
How to you take 26 letters, the english language and mold it into this? Something that seems to talk to my soul; That makes me think and smile all at once. The structure appeals to me. This is really good, but then again... it's you... so that's expected.
5/9/2004 c1 26Karasu no sei
Beautiful... I really like what you've done with the rhymes. It doesn't detract anything from the piece, rather, adds a new level.
Like all your other work, wonderful
~Karasu
5/9/2004 c1 3Cry Tears of Darkness
simple beautiful!
tho... : a) "Somethig Amiss"... er somethiNg?
b) what's amiss mean anyways?
hehehe!
Yes, but beautiful! so sad and well written! loved!

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