for Red Rum5/17/2004 c1 Chris Gardner
It was a very good begining consitering it is only the begining!
It was a very good begining consitering it is only the begining!
5/10/2004 c1 
22slave to the voices
I loved how you captured the thoughts and language of the child, and also the band aid part. Unfortunately, I thought the end was kind of cheesy. I think it could use some work. Keep writing!
**Slave**
22slave to the voicesI loved how you captured the thoughts and language of the child, and also the band aid part. Unfortunately, I thought the end was kind of cheesy. I think it could use some work. Keep writing!
**Slave**