5/7/2006 c1 2StrawberryStarburst
Nice. To the point. My poems are different though. Not sad or happy. Kind of neutral. I added you to my favourited awhile ago, but I'm finally reviewing. :)
Nice. To the point. My poems are different though. Not sad or happy. Kind of neutral. I added you to my favourited awhile ago, but I'm finally reviewing. :)
1/3/2006 c1 89brevis
the last line was terribly true; how many poets CAN bitch like you?
loved it. a message many people need to hear.
the last line was terribly true; how many poets CAN bitch like you?
loved it. a message many people need to hear.
4/5/2005 c1 8Ellori
Excellent put, and very true. I personally don't mind sad and angry poetry, but it's gotta have a bloody meaning. I don't fancy lines like: "My broken heart is bleeding, tears fall from my eyes like black tar." at all. Those lines, however, are actually more poetic than your average teen goth/emo poem. :P And frankly, we've had enough of sad relationships, and breakups, and so on. Bring in the happiness and joyful love!
Excellent put, and very true. I personally don't mind sad and angry poetry, but it's gotta have a bloody meaning. I don't fancy lines like: "My broken heart is bleeding, tears fall from my eyes like black tar." at all. Those lines, however, are actually more poetic than your average teen goth/emo poem. :P And frankly, we've had enough of sad relationships, and breakups, and so on. Bring in the happiness and joyful love!
2/12/2005 c1 83Shattered Heart a Broken Dream
i like that. i do admit I write alot of the angst and being pissed off because that is my outlet. so instead of being like the jackasses at school who take their anger out with their fists. i take them out of paper. Good poem it was refreshing
i like that. i do admit I write alot of the angst and being pissed off because that is my outlet. so instead of being like the jackasses at school who take their anger out with their fists. i take them out of paper. Good poem it was refreshing
2/10/2005 c1 29Livi Z
XD, that's great. And so friggin' true! I'm tired of all the angst-y poems. Why not have some fun/joyful ones, ne?
And to answer your question...not many poets can.
Great job!
~`*`~Breeze~`*`~
XD, that's great. And so friggin' true! I'm tired of all the angst-y poems. Why not have some fun/joyful ones, ne?
And to answer your question...not many poets can.
Great job!
~`*`~Breeze~`*`~
12/28/2004 c1 99E.M. Laicrist
Wow, I just love this. Holds true for everyone like you say. Definately going on my favorites.
Wow, I just love this. Holds true for everyone like you say. Definately going on my favorites.
12/18/2004 c1 Mecha Scorpion
Heh heh heh... I've got to show this to a goth I know.
Heh heh heh... I've got to show this to a goth I know.
7/10/2004 c1 49AngryAngel
I want to thank you for the honest review that you gave my work. I read your poem and I say,"Amen!" There is much too much of this "woe is me, darkness is going to envelop you and your soul" crap. No one has written good angst ridden poems since Emily Dickinson. However, you do strike me as a bit of a primadonna, but to each their own, eh? God Bless and keep writing...
I want to thank you for the honest review that you gave my work. I read your poem and I say,"Amen!" There is much too much of this "woe is me, darkness is going to envelop you and your soul" crap. No one has written good angst ridden poems since Emily Dickinson. However, you do strike me as a bit of a primadonna, but to each their own, eh? God Bless and keep writing...
6/20/2004 c1 44GreenLantern500
Not only is this hilarious, but I'm really impressed by how you kept up the rhyme and the alliteration at the same time.
Not only is this hilarious, but I'm really impressed by how you kept up the rhyme and the alliteration at the same time.
6/10/2004 c1 12L'Ame Artistique
I'm glad that you're acknowledging that people need to write about happier things. Don't really understand why there's the need for all the language, but...
Also, I didn't really understand the review you gave me on my CJS poem. I respect your opinion, but you didn't explain what you thought enough. I was just trying to write a poem about his character in POTC, b/c he was really funny in that movie. L8er.
I'm glad that you're acknowledging that people need to write about happier things. Don't really understand why there's the need for all the language, but...
Also, I didn't really understand the review you gave me on my CJS poem. I respect your opinion, but you didn't explain what you thought enough. I was just trying to write a poem about his character in POTC, b/c he was really funny in that movie. L8er.
5/12/2004 c1 Heather Parris
uhm, i'm sry, but i HAVE to disagree. i CAN write happy glorious poems, but i choose not to, and my poems about death, despair, and suicide, they come from the HEART, so i would like to tell you, in no rude way, that this sort of offends me.
uhm, i'm sry, but i HAVE to disagree. i CAN write happy glorious poems, but i choose not to, and my poems about death, despair, and suicide, they come from the HEART, so i would like to tell you, in no rude way, that this sort of offends me.
5/11/2004 c1 12moonymonster
XD That's great! Very very well put together. I wish I'd written it so I could say I wrote it. But for this line:
"Any jackass can, but its fiction."
it should be:
"Any jackass can, but it's fiction."
Just remember that it's is short for it is, whereas its is a possessive. Occasionally it's is also used as a possessive, but I think that's only when it's someone's house or something...Like Martha's house, or it's house, whereas its would be used for its wings or its body.
Other than that, it's great! Keep it up!
XD That's great! Very very well put together. I wish I'd written it so I could say I wrote it. But for this line:
"Any jackass can, but its fiction."
it should be:
"Any jackass can, but it's fiction."
Just remember that it's is short for it is, whereas its is a possessive. Occasionally it's is also used as a possessive, but I think that's only when it's someone's house or something...Like Martha's house, or it's house, whereas its would be used for its wings or its body.
Other than that, it's great! Keep it up!