for Hailing Dawn11/21/2005 c1 Erico
THIS IS THE WORST STORY I'VE EVER READ IN MY LIFE! DON'T WUIT YOUR DAY JOB! gosh...
THIS IS THE WORST STORY I'VE EVER READ IN MY LIFE! DON'T WUIT YOUR DAY JOB! gosh...
3/13/2005 c1 I DON'T THINK SO BUDDY THAT EXACTLY HOW U TRY AND KILL ME
IT SUCKED SO BAD I SAID IT SUCKED! WAH WAH WAH IT SUCKED
IT SUCKED SO BAD I SAID IT SUCKED! WAH WAH WAH IT SUCKED
1/23/2005 c10 Lauren334
This was a really good chapter! I really love the two new characters. Can't wait to see how the killing Darkdios goes for um =P
This was a really good chapter! I really love the two new characters. Can't wait to see how the killing Darkdios goes for um =P
12/15/2004 c1 
5lool
Hey, This seems really ineresting,but you lost me. I would like it if you have some sort of description of all the characters and a general sketch of the plot before the actual story starts. Your plot seems to be very complex, so I think that if you do this it will improve the story. Do you know where I could find stuff that says Canada on it or something distinctly Canadian? I have a friend who's obsessed... I've been to all the major cities in Canada over this past summer, Ottowa, Montreal, Toronto, etc. I had ot go with my grandparents, so the trip sucked. I was on a Chinese tour bus and my arrogant racist grandfather kept mocking them and trying to make me carry gym bags filled with food everywhere. Freakin cans of pineapples even. Anyways...
Lool.
5loolHey, This seems really ineresting,but you lost me. I would like it if you have some sort of description of all the characters and a general sketch of the plot before the actual story starts. Your plot seems to be very complex, so I think that if you do this it will improve the story. Do you know where I could find stuff that says Canada on it or something distinctly Canadian? I have a friend who's obsessed... I've been to all the major cities in Canada over this past summer, Ottowa, Montreal, Toronto, etc. I had ot go with my grandparents, so the trip sucked. I was on a Chinese tour bus and my arrogant racist grandfather kept mocking them and trying to make me carry gym bags filled with food everywhere. Freakin cans of pineapples even. Anyways...
Lool.
11/5/2004 c18 XxDragon Princess NikkixX
Okay, I dunno if it is just my computer, but all i could see was a bunch of really weird symbols and words and scattered phrases. *sniffles* I was all excited to read it too! DAMNIT! Well, i guess i'll go email you and figure out whats wrong. Bye!
~nikki~
Okay, I dunno if it is just my computer, but all i could see was a bunch of really weird symbols and words and scattered phrases. *sniffles* I was all excited to read it too! DAMNIT! Well, i guess i'll go email you and figure out whats wrong. Bye!
~nikki~
9/17/2004 c17 XxDragon Princess NikkixX
Gah! This review is uber short! I'm sorry, i have to be quick. I love you and the chapter! Very good! Keep up the good work. *muah*
~Nikki~
Gah! This review is uber short! I'm sorry, i have to be quick. I love you and the chapter! Very good! Keep up the good work. *muah*
~Nikki~
9/13/2004 c17 2Miller8
Computer problems? Ouchzors. Best thing I can recommend is one of two things:
1) Format the bugger
2) Buy an entirely new computer. Works for me every time... Well. Number one does. I WISH I could afford and brand new PC.
Anyways, good chapter at least. Worth the wait..? Of course it was. Hope your internet connection gets fixed ASAP
2Miller8Computer problems? Ouchzors. Best thing I can recommend is one of two things:
1) Format the bugger
2) Buy an entirely new computer. Works for me every time... Well. Number one does. I WISH I could afford and brand new PC.
Anyways, good chapter at least. Worth the wait..? Of course it was. Hope your internet connection gets fixed ASAP
8/29/2004 c16 Miller8
Sorry for taking so long to review. Was away for two weeks.
Nice explanation... even though I already understood x.x;;
Anyways... I like where this is going. Nice pirate-ish personality for Fyrron heh heh
Sorry for taking so long to review. Was away for two weeks.
Nice explanation... even though I already understood x.x;;
Anyways... I like where this is going. Nice pirate-ish personality for Fyrron heh heh
8/28/2004 c11 1Genuinely-xoxo-Superficial
*blinks* hang on, he can't be the son.. he's half elfin, right? Oh.. unless the king or queen of drajorian's elfin... I'm confused. Doesn't royalty always have to marry the same race? That's why Tanis had so much trouble, if you read umm whatsitcalled dragonlance! I'm not complaining, though, it'd be really cool if zarvoan really was the 'prince'!
1Genuinely-xoxo-Superficial*blinks* hang on, he can't be the son.. he's half elfin, right? Oh.. unless the king or queen of drajorian's elfin... I'm confused. Doesn't royalty always have to marry the same race? That's why Tanis had so much trouble, if you read umm whatsitcalled dragonlance! I'm not complaining, though, it'd be really cool if zarvoan really was the 'prince'!
8/28/2004 c10 Genuinely-xoxo-Superficial
oh yay! yAY! A drow! Well... i mean... he's a *good* drow, right? As in drizzt type drow, not matriarchy subdued/crazed drow? I loved it how you said "the scenery was pitiful" hahaha totally cracked me up. Wt gr8 attitude!
corrections: "both having taught" change it to taut... "insuring" to ensuring... and for some reason you keep switching back (momentarily) to present tense: "she’s a lot stronger than" and "The man rearranges"
oh and one question... as for the breeze thingum that ausar created- is that one of the innate drow abilities? Cos i think drizzt only used faerie fire and other little things but I don't remember magical winds. Okay tts all for now! cheers!
oh yay! yAY! A drow! Well... i mean... he's a *good* drow, right? As in drizzt type drow, not matriarchy subdued/crazed drow? I loved it how you said "the scenery was pitiful" hahaha totally cracked me up. Wt gr8 attitude!
corrections: "both having taught" change it to taut... "insuring" to ensuring... and for some reason you keep switching back (momentarily) to present tense: "she’s a lot stronger than" and "The man rearranges"
oh and one question... as for the breeze thingum that ausar created- is that one of the innate drow abilities? Cos i think drizzt only used faerie fire and other little things but I don't remember magical winds. Okay tts all for now! cheers!
8/28/2004 c9 Genuinely-xoxo-Superficial
hm detail, detail. Who wears G strings around on adventures, though? Okay... forgot u were a guy.. *mumbles* must be a guy thing... =P
o yeah i forgot to mention in the previous chpt review that u probs used the word "spike" too many times.. like after awhile we get the picture so it's quite unnecessary to hear how, well, spikey his clothes/armour are/is.
"Even though Zarvoan didn’t weigh very much, he did gain speed as he fell." Force = mass x acceleration. Speed doesn't affect it? as in, the only force acting on him other than air resistance is Weight. Which is 9.8 x his mass.
"gifted with elvin site" should be
sight.
"Laughing persisted" should be laughter.
Anyway the burning hand bit totally cracked me up! Hahhaa.. i remember that spell... sorta.. vaguely =P
hm detail, detail. Who wears G strings around on adventures, though? Okay... forgot u were a guy.. *mumbles* must be a guy thing... =P
o yeah i forgot to mention in the previous chpt review that u probs used the word "spike" too many times.. like after awhile we get the picture so it's quite unnecessary to hear how, well, spikey his clothes/armour are/is.
"Even though Zarvoan didn’t weigh very much, he did gain speed as he fell." Force = mass x acceleration. Speed doesn't affect it? as in, the only force acting on him other than air resistance is Weight. Which is 9.8 x his mass.
"gifted with elvin site" should be
sight.
"Laughing persisted" should be laughter.
Anyway the burning hand bit totally cracked me up! Hahhaa.. i remember that spell... sorta.. vaguely =P
8/28/2004 c8 Genuinely-xoxo-Superficial
lol i reli liked this chpt.. politics and *cough* subtleties. Nice chap, huh, assassinating all the rulers.. ahhaha i like him!
lol i reli liked this chpt.. politics and *cough* subtleties. Nice chap, huh, assassinating all the rulers.. ahhaha i like him!
8/20/2004 c16 13XxDragon Princess NikkixX
Ahh! I LOVE YOU *throws arms around you and gives you a huge kiss* this is too good! It's so funny and interesting and never dull!
I AM IN LOVE WITH THE STORY OF AUSAR/FYRRON/NIKKI. It's THE BEST. Oh. . so Fyrron didn't know it was 16 years later either. Poor guy. And i love his iniation thing! Woo! Go Nikki! She is definitly like me *nods* yup. Fuck with me you get a right hook straight in the face man.
It was hella good with the kiss and the whole naked thing and climbing up the ladder. I was laughing out loud!
My favorite color is blue. . you asked that in ur review for the Assassin. Oh! *giggles* I'm excited!
Love triangle between Nikki/Fyrron/Ausar! HELL YES! I'm excited! lol! At least I hope tehre is a love triangle.
Anyway, LOVE it mister. *hugz* Update soon!
~Nikki~
13XxDragon Princess NikkixXAhh! I LOVE YOU *throws arms around you and gives you a huge kiss* this is too good! It's so funny and interesting and never dull!
I AM IN LOVE WITH THE STORY OF AUSAR/FYRRON/NIKKI. It's THE BEST. Oh. . so Fyrron didn't know it was 16 years later either. Poor guy. And i love his iniation thing! Woo! Go Nikki! She is definitly like me *nods* yup. Fuck with me you get a right hook straight in the face man.
It was hella good with the kiss and the whole naked thing and climbing up the ladder. I was laughing out loud!
My favorite color is blue. . you asked that in ur review for the Assassin. Oh! *giggles* I'm excited!
Love triangle between Nikki/Fyrron/Ausar! HELL YES! I'm excited! lol! At least I hope tehre is a love triangle.
Anyway, LOVE it mister. *hugz* Update soon!
~Nikki~
8/20/2004 c16 food plz
i dont know if my review before worked, because it said comunication error when i finished it. So anyway! again.. AMASZING! Dios werewolf... col your doing an excellent job!
UPDATE!
Food... plz...
i dont know if my review before worked, because it said comunication error when i finished it. So anyway! again.. AMASZING! Dios werewolf... col your doing an excellent job!
UPDATE!
Food... plz...
8/20/2004 c16 FOOD-PLZ
YES! im gonna review on a day you posted a chapter! Man, you did right alot on dios this chapter. So... dios is gonna turn werewolf right? ehheh cool.
Gawd, excellent chapter! i like it alot.
UPDATE!
food plz...
YES! im gonna review on a day you posted a chapter! Man, you did right alot on dios this chapter. So... dios is gonna turn werewolf right? ehheh cool.
Gawd, excellent chapter! i like it alot.
UPDATE!
food plz...