for The Third Day5/14/2004 c2 
11Misoshiru
this is an interesting story. it sounds like a cross between pitch black and 28 days. i dunno. its cool, update soon!
11Misoshiruthis is an interesting story. it sounds like a cross between pitch black and 28 days. i dunno. its cool, update soon!
5/14/2004 c2 404358034958034
Just as good as the last, if with a few spelling errors. Keep up the good work!
Just as good as the last, if with a few spelling errors. Keep up the good work!
5/13/2004 c1 22slave to the voices
My biggest problem with this story is that it's a video recording but there's no action. Am I watching two undescribable and nameless men standing (or sitting or lying down or...) around talking? It reads more like a tape recording. Now for the good news; it's a great idea and I will be looking forward to more in the future. The dialogue is believable and well written. Good job, keep writing.
**Slave**
22slave to the voicesMy biggest problem with this story is that it's a video recording but there's no action. Am I watching two undescribable and nameless men standing (or sitting or lying down or...) around talking? It reads more like a tape recording. Now for the good news; it's a great idea and I will be looking forward to more in the future. The dialogue is believable and well written. Good job, keep writing.
**Slave**
5/13/2004 c1 11Wolfie Star26
that was wonderful, you seem to know alot about that stuff, anyway, please update soon.
11Wolfie Star26that was wonderful, you seem to know alot about that stuff, anyway, please update soon.