for Nightingale's Song4/18/2005 c1 
2Strawberry'd
Hm, very.. profound. I liked this a lot. It gave me tingles ^_~
Very nice. good job!
2Strawberry'dHm, very.. profound. I liked this a lot. It gave me tingles ^_~
Very nice. good job!
3/27/2005 c1 52AboveTheSalt
This is so beautiful. It's going on my favorites list. You have the gift of expressing yourself through poetry, a use of words so eloquent... breath-taking. The message behind it, the intermittent italicized lines, an unnamable quality that comes straight from your soul all come together in this brilliant piece. This really is one of my favorites on fictionpress. Thank you for posting it.
-salt.
52AboveTheSaltThis is so beautiful. It's going on my favorites list. You have the gift of expressing yourself through poetry, a use of words so eloquent... breath-taking. The message behind it, the intermittent italicized lines, an unnamable quality that comes straight from your soul all come together in this brilliant piece. This really is one of my favorites on fictionpress. Thank you for posting it.
-salt.
11/27/2004 c1 127Eirien
Wow, this is absolutely beautiful. There is such a musicality to it, created by your choice of words, the rhyme and rhythm, and also you manage to evoke such an atmosphere, by phrases reminiscent of fairy tales and ancient myths. I like the dialogical structure, where one voice, much alike to the actual song of the nightingale, repeats the main theme in always parallel but varied phrases, and a second voice intrudes. The movement is from a happier to a sad mood, and the mention of death in the end gives the whole poem a much fuller dimension, embodying the themes of love and pain/ death that for many are expressed in the nightingale's song. Perfectly written.
127EirienWow, this is absolutely beautiful. There is such a musicality to it, created by your choice of words, the rhyme and rhythm, and also you manage to evoke such an atmosphere, by phrases reminiscent of fairy tales and ancient myths. I like the dialogical structure, where one voice, much alike to the actual song of the nightingale, repeats the main theme in always parallel but varied phrases, and a second voice intrudes. The movement is from a happier to a sad mood, and the mention of death in the end gives the whole poem a much fuller dimension, embodying the themes of love and pain/ death that for many are expressed in the nightingale's song. Perfectly written.
11/12/2004 c1 23Shalafi
Wow. Powerful. That is an awesome poem! I don't think the second "While the moon was slowly waning..." was really needed. But hey, it's your poetry, and it's alot better than any of mine. Keep it up!
23ShalafiWow. Powerful. That is an awesome poem! I don't think the second "While the moon was slowly waning..." was really needed. But hey, it's your poetry, and it's alot better than any of mine. Keep it up!
9/19/2004 c1 43Toph Gonzalez
Man, I am at a lost with words... this poem just gripped me so. Perhaps you could help me with my poems by providing constructive criticisms?
43Toph GonzalezMan, I am at a lost with words... this poem just gripped me so. Perhaps you could help me with my poems by providing constructive criticisms?
8/29/2004 c1 133S.C. Preclarus Noctis
Wow. Amazing! You're a very talented writer, and this is just...wow. I don't know how to describe it. It's so good! It reminded me of Edgar Allan Poe..a bit of that dark love, y'know? Just amazing. Write on!
133S.C. Preclarus NoctisWow. Amazing! You're a very talented writer, and this is just...wow. I don't know how to describe it. It's so good! It reminded me of Edgar Allan Poe..a bit of that dark love, y'know? Just amazing. Write on!
8/23/2004 c1 51Helgmelia
Very eloquent. Through spacing and word choice, you've achieved a quiet and elegant mood. I like the bit about the Weaver.
51HelgmeliaVery eloquent. Through spacing and word choice, you've achieved a quiet and elegant mood. I like the bit about the Weaver.
8/21/2004 c1 22Gevo
Hello! And thanks for your review on my poem, I really appreciate it. :)
Your poem... I think it is difficult to understand. But very, very beautiful. I love it.
Oh, and I read your bio... I think it is stupid that you did not get your high school diploma just because you don't speak french. It's the same in Germany. There are, basically, two languages, High German and Low German (stupid name!) and if you want to do something - school or job - you have to speak High German. And when my family and I talk in Low German in public, we're asked stupid questions, like, do you know how to use this? *points at telephone* I guess you know how that feels...
22GevoHello! And thanks for your review on my poem, I really appreciate it. :)
Your poem... I think it is difficult to understand. But very, very beautiful. I love it.
Oh, and I read your bio... I think it is stupid that you did not get your high school diploma just because you don't speak french. It's the same in Germany. There are, basically, two languages, High German and Low German (stupid name!) and if you want to do something - school or job - you have to speak High German. And when my family and I talk in Low German in public, we're asked stupid questions, like, do you know how to use this? *points at telephone* I guess you know how that feels...
8/21/2004 c1 37eew
~ I haven't been visiting this site for a long time but the moment I read this, I felt like I've missed a lot. This is truly one great work of art.
Simply B. E. A. U. T. I. F. U. L.
Every word did its purpose. This is definitely going to my favorites.
~c. butterfly~**
37eew~ I haven't been visiting this site for a long time but the moment I read this, I felt like I've missed a lot. This is truly one great work of art.
Simply B. E. A. U. T. I. F. U. L.
Every word did its purpose. This is definitely going to my favorites.
~c. butterfly~**
7/18/2004 c1 19Hershey249
So sad...but so well done. I love how you threaded song through the whole piece, with the "chimes" and "notes", and I love the flow of the entire poem. I have to say that "adorned in colors of the free" is an intriguing line, seeing as nightingales are black...is death perhaps freedom? Intriguing...
19Hershey249So sad...but so well done. I love how you threaded song through the whole piece, with the "chimes" and "notes", and I love the flow of the entire poem. I have to say that "adorned in colors of the free" is an intriguing line, seeing as nightingales are black...is death perhaps freedom? Intriguing...
7/15/2004 c1 20Elbereth141
beautiful... i've never heard a nightingale, so i can't comment on that aspect, but it must be a damned good sound cause otherwise this wouldn't work at all. :)
20Elbereth141beautiful... i've never heard a nightingale, so i can't comment on that aspect, but it must be a damned good sound cause otherwise this wouldn't work at all. :)