
5/26/2004 c1
3dahommie32992
Hi good story, But i think that u (thats right U) have no right to tell me how to do anythng plus i didn't really mean for it to sound that i owned this girl ok bye

Hi good story, But i think that u (thats right U) have no right to tell me how to do anythng plus i didn't really mean for it to sound that i owned this girl ok bye
5/21/2004 c1
20My Psychosis
I love this. The only part that doesnt really fit is the second line in the first stanza, "Unsuspected, I didn't hear them say" Unsuspected doesn't fit. Maybe try unsuspecting? Just my opinion. But it's great, really it is.

I love this. The only part that doesnt really fit is the second line in the first stanza, "Unsuspected, I didn't hear them say" Unsuspected doesn't fit. Maybe try unsuspecting? Just my opinion. But it's great, really it is.