for Bete Noir8/27/2004 c1 
123Raya Dronaile
how sweet! very cool! i love the peed of the poem, and the words you use! great stuff! maybe you'd like to read a couple of mine, I hear they are really good! great job^_^
123Raya Dronailehow sweet! very cool! i love the peed of the poem, and the words you use! great stuff! maybe you'd like to read a couple of mine, I hear they are really good! great job^_^
8/26/2004 c1 292Fabian Cortez
Beautifully crafted poem. I loved it and was engrossed by it from start to finish.
Very Well Done.
KEEP WRITING!
F.C
You're welcome to check out some of my works if you like. I'd value your thoughts. I think you might enjoy "Captured Memory", "Roses" or even "Immortality's Last Verse" see what you think.
292Fabian CortezBeautifully crafted poem. I loved it and was engrossed by it from start to finish.
Very Well Done.
KEEP WRITING!
F.C
You're welcome to check out some of my works if you like. I'd value your thoughts. I think you might enjoy "Captured Memory", "Roses" or even "Immortality's Last Verse" see what you think.
7/2/2004 c1 88breakme
Wow thats beautiful.
After all, that's what she craves
To be your only scarlet rose
Lying on your grave
I love that part. Its all quite vivid and emotional.
88breakmeWow thats beautiful.
After all, that's what she craves
To be your only scarlet rose
Lying on your grave
I love that part. Its all quite vivid and emotional.
6/27/2004 c1 Melancholy Butterfly
A very interesting poem, in which the very first stanza captured my imagination. The rhyming structure is even, I like the feelings evoked by your use of repetition. I also like the reference to Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet, conveying a sense of tragedy though to me this poem seems to portray a different sort. Well done!
A very interesting poem, in which the very first stanza captured my imagination. The rhyming structure is even, I like the feelings evoked by your use of repetition. I also like the reference to Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet, conveying a sense of tragedy though to me this poem seems to portray a different sort. Well done!
6/23/2004 c1 24mAxTeR
wow.. wow.. beautiful indeed.. nicely written.. pls keep on writing.. i enjoy this one and with the eye-catching title.. great work.. r/r mine too..
24mAxTeRwow.. wow.. beautiful indeed.. nicely written.. pls keep on writing.. i enjoy this one and with the eye-catching title.. great work.. r/r mine too..
6/14/2004 c1 7neunundneunzig
One of the better poems I've read. :D
It's very vague. It almost sounds like it's about a prostitute...It's pretty nonetheless, and the way you word it is captivating. The rhymes fit, and you've done a swell job of not letting them take over the poem rather than articulating the message by choosing words that rhyme rather than words that work. I do that a lot.
And yet it's still a little shadowy. It attempts to describe a feeling while providing a story behind it, but the story's somewhat veiled (too much for a proper assessment). The feeling is very clear however.
Yay.
7neunundneunzigOne of the better poems I've read. :D
It's very vague. It almost sounds like it's about a prostitute...It's pretty nonetheless, and the way you word it is captivating. The rhymes fit, and you've done a swell job of not letting them take over the poem rather than articulating the message by choosing words that rhyme rather than words that work. I do that a lot.
And yet it's still a little shadowy. It attempts to describe a feeling while providing a story behind it, but the story's somewhat veiled (too much for a proper assessment). The feeling is very clear however.
Yay.
5/24/2004 c1 30Roadside Dryer
Great, I love it. I like the Juliet Romeo thing...great! Update soon!
-HH updated.
Great job...favorites.
30Roadside DryerGreat, I love it. I like the Juliet Romeo thing...great! Update soon!
-HH updated.
Great job...favorites.
5/24/2004 c1 Carolina.Scribe
This is a wonderful poem, I love the rhyme scheme and the partial refrain is very awesome. I've not read such a great poem from you in a long while, and this totally makes up for it. ^_^ I have to say that this is beatuiful.
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Oh, by the way, I've got the tenth chapter up on my story. Hope you enjoy it. ^_^
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Love ya,
Jessica
This is a wonderful poem, I love the rhyme scheme and the partial refrain is very awesome. I've not read such a great poem from you in a long while, and this totally makes up for it. ^_^ I have to say that this is beatuiful.
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Oh, by the way, I've got the tenth chapter up on my story. Hope you enjoy it. ^_^
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Love ya,
Jessica
5/23/2004 c1 17amarthawen
great poem. i liked the feeling youve placed into it, the battle between the unknown characters of love. nice.
17amarthawengreat poem. i liked the feeling youve placed into it, the battle between the unknown characters of love. nice.
5/23/2004 c1 34Iris Devine
ahh! You put this in your LJ too!
The "won't you be her Romeo...Juliet" bit is a little cliche... other than that, 'tis good!
I like the
"After all, that's what she craves;
to be your only scarlet rose
lying on your grave"
stanza. 'Tis pretty!
34Iris Devineahh! You put this in your LJ too!
The "won't you be her Romeo...Juliet" bit is a little cliche... other than that, 'tis good!
I like the
"After all, that's what she craves;
to be your only scarlet rose
lying on your grave"
stanza. 'Tis pretty!