for City Street After a Downpour of Rain9/3/2004 c1 
16Pico the Great
Hooray! I can see this happening. It's cool, and I like the whole imagery of rain. I know you had to do "fly quick" as part of the rhyme scheme, but it still works out quite well.
Yay!
-PTG
16Pico the GreatHooray! I can see this happening. It's cool, and I like the whole imagery of rain. I know you had to do "fly quick" as part of the rhyme scheme, but it still works out quite well.
Yay!
-PTG
5/26/2004 c1 beatlesloser
good, i liked it, especially how it captured a singular moment like a haiku's really meant to do. the rythym is a bit off, but still quite good for first attempt
good, i liked it, especially how it captured a singular moment like a haiku's really meant to do. the rythym is a bit off, but still quite good for first attempt