
6/11/2004 c1 scissor sex
Subtle. The idea of a 'bad luck charm'(yes, that's an oxymoron) isn't -entirely- original, but I like the story and I like how you used an innocent yellow umbrella as the 'charm'. Felt a slight chill when I read it and realized the true nature of the 'brella. (The story reminds me of a goosebumps book I read when I was in second grade... 'The Lost Treasure' or something like that. Good description of the old couple on the train, though they seem a bit unrealistic (perhaps that was the point?) I like Crazy Joon. Oh man oh man yeah I like him a lot. xD
The ending was a bit sudden. Perhaps you could edit that? And you should change the summary. "Dysfuntional relationship?" Their ('their' meaning Mimi and Bailey, of course) relationship seems like a normal sibling relationship. In fact, actually friendlier than most. Anyway, this review could have been organized better, but eh... I don't really have a good excuse for that, unless you count "I didn't feel like it."
Subtle. The idea of a 'bad luck charm'(yes, that's an oxymoron) isn't -entirely- original, but I like the story and I like how you used an innocent yellow umbrella as the 'charm'. Felt a slight chill when I read it and realized the true nature of the 'brella. (The story reminds me of a goosebumps book I read when I was in second grade... 'The Lost Treasure' or something like that. Good description of the old couple on the train, though they seem a bit unrealistic (perhaps that was the point?) I like Crazy Joon. Oh man oh man yeah I like him a lot. xD
The ending was a bit sudden. Perhaps you could edit that? And you should change the summary. "Dysfuntional relationship?" Their ('their' meaning Mimi and Bailey, of course) relationship seems like a normal sibling relationship. In fact, actually friendlier than most. Anyway, this review could have been organized better, but eh... I don't really have a good excuse for that, unless you count "I didn't feel like it."
6/2/2004 c1 hummer
Um... A bit strange... but cool.. I didnt really get most of it... oh well! Oh... and are you ever going update or finish Quirks Among the Orderly? Or have you abandoned the story altogether? Hmm.. I hope not.. I really like your style of writing... it's funny and 'blow up in your face' kind of humor.. not that i really know what it means... 0.o whoops.. Anyway.. cute story.. a bit confusing, but.. meh...
Um... A bit strange... but cool.. I didnt really get most of it... oh well! Oh... and are you ever going update or finish Quirks Among the Orderly? Or have you abandoned the story altogether? Hmm.. I hope not.. I really like your style of writing... it's funny and 'blow up in your face' kind of humor.. not that i really know what it means... 0.o whoops.. Anyway.. cute story.. a bit confusing, but.. meh...
6/1/2004 c1
1pineapples
I've always noticed the way you describe things, and the words you use...ksdjfksjdhf I love it! Sometimes I have to read it a few times just to understand it, but that's good!
Anyways, wow. I honestly love all your stories & poems! I've read them all, and you really have quite a knack for words. Looking forward to any new ones you might have coming. : )
- Cat

I've always noticed the way you describe things, and the words you use...ksdjfksjdhf I love it! Sometimes I have to read it a few times just to understand it, but that's good!
Anyways, wow. I honestly love all your stories & poems! I've read them all, and you really have quite a knack for words. Looking forward to any new ones you might have coming. : )
- Cat
5/31/2004 c1
13Silver Dolphin - archive
Woah...that was... I don't know whether to say 'odd' or 'cool' first, because it was both. I also don't know what to say because I'm feeling a little disoriented from that... *wanders off in a daze* O_o

Woah...that was... I don't know whether to say 'odd' or 'cool' first, because it was both. I also don't know what to say because I'm feeling a little disoriented from that... *wanders off in a daze* O_o