for Painful Kisses6/1/2005 c6 
7R.A. Sears
Abrupt, but it does go with Sibyl's thought patterns through the whole thing. Although sudden, the ending wasn't too bad. And ya know... you shouldn't let readers sucker you into extending something you don't want to. Sure, they whine lots, but they'll get over it.
7R.A. SearsAbrupt, but it does go with Sibyl's thought patterns through the whole thing. Although sudden, the ending wasn't too bad. And ya know... you shouldn't let readers sucker you into extending something you don't want to. Sure, they whine lots, but they'll get over it.
6/1/2005 c2 R.A. Sears
Ooh. Better watch out for the Jesus-freaks on this site. They might get ya in trouble for sexual situations involving a minor.
Anywho, it's not a bad start. Needs some typo checks, but you know how I am with typos...
Ooh. Better watch out for the Jesus-freaks on this site. They might get ya in trouble for sexual situations involving a minor.
Anywho, it's not a bad start. Needs some typo checks, but you know how I am with typos...
2/28/2005 c6 Melissa Lea Night
wow, awsome ending, i really like it. you should connect all these chapters together into one big part. it's great sage, i applaud you.
wow, awsome ending, i really like it. you should connect all these chapters together into one big part. it's great sage, i applaud you.
1/7/2005 c6 13sunscraped
A rather abrupt ending, I take it the first chapter was a flashback? What was that, it didn't seem to connect with the rest of the storyline... Yet that was pretty good for a short story.~!
13sunscrapedA rather abrupt ending, I take it the first chapter was a flashback? What was that, it didn't seem to connect with the rest of the storyline... Yet that was pretty good for a short story.~!
1/7/2005 c2 sunscraped
Heh... kinky vampire stories. Not bad, not bad. I like your style of writing, and I noticeds electric is one of your favourite adjectives. It pays to snoop around on your firend's review pages and look around for a few stories... i will read more later. Once again, good job. Not many mistakes.~!
Heh... kinky vampire stories. Not bad, not bad. I like your style of writing, and I noticeds electric is one of your favourite adjectives. It pays to snoop around on your firend's review pages and look around for a few stories... i will read more later. Once again, good job. Not many mistakes.~!
1/2/2005 c6 4Lady Katreina
.-_-. Poor ADAM! .-_-. *sniff* *sniff* I hope he finds her again and this time she don't wanna die. .-_-. *sniff* ^_^
4Lady Katreina.-_-. Poor ADAM! .-_-. *sniff* *sniff* I hope he finds her again and this time she don't wanna die. .-_-. *sniff* ^_^
1/1/2005 c6 50Tortured Sakura
mwuahahahahah yes another chappy. but no it's the end!1 SEQUEL SEQUEL I DEMAND A SEQUEL! lol
50Tortured Sakuramwuahahahahah yes another chappy. but no it's the end!1 SEQUEL SEQUEL I DEMAND A SEQUEL! lol
1/1/2005 c5 4Lady Katreina
O.O Well she got to the point didn't she! ^_^ Oh my! ((no you did smooth transactions throughout the story,)) Thank you
4Lady KatreinaO.O Well she got to the point didn't she! ^_^ Oh my! ((no you did smooth transactions throughout the story,)) Thank you
1/1/2005 c5 Miseria Angelo
well i just found another favorite vamire story. shit man u write kick ass stories. well to answer ur question it worked out well there was nothing wrong with it. UPDATE SOON!
well i just found another favorite vamire story. shit man u write kick ass stories. well to answer ur question it worked out well there was nothing wrong with it. UPDATE SOON!
12/31/2004 c5 amaya dwyn
I think that was great, one of the best chapters yet. Good job, I love what you got so far :-) write faster!
I think that was great, one of the best chapters yet. Good job, I love what you got so far :-) write faster!