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Why the hell is Terence still with Jason? Maybee he would be more upbeat to be not together with someone he no longer loves... Will there be an update? I would like to continue this story...
Why the hell is Terence still with Jason? Maybee he would be more upbeat to be not together with someone he no longer loves... Will there be an update? I would like to continue this story...
7/24/2004 c1 
16Germaine Amundsen
Alright dear, I'll admit I haven't actually read this, but... I always try to help out fellow writers. There's just a few things I wanted to point out-first, if there's anything about a story that's not yours (aside from using brand-names and the like, of course) then it belongs on ffn, not here. Second, in the summary you said that no lie can last indefinitely. Well, that could work, but... indefinite is just something vague or non-specific, not necessarily forever, you know? I just wanted to suggest that maybe you should change that to a more accurate word. Well-written summaries always give the reader more confidence in your writing abilities.
Kisses!
16Germaine AmundsenAlright dear, I'll admit I haven't actually read this, but... I always try to help out fellow writers. There's just a few things I wanted to point out-first, if there's anything about a story that's not yours (aside from using brand-names and the like, of course) then it belongs on ffn, not here. Second, in the summary you said that no lie can last indefinitely. Well, that could work, but... indefinite is just something vague or non-specific, not necessarily forever, you know? I just wanted to suggest that maybe you should change that to a more accurate word. Well-written summaries always give the reader more confidence in your writing abilities.
Kisses!
7/3/2004 c2 fighting my sanity
HAHAHAHA! LOL! I'm laughing so hard, dude! Enna requested this to me (kinda.. she mentioned it in her latest e-mail!) and I'm really liking it so far! Uber-funny!
Update when you guys can! TTYL! =D
HAHAHAHA! LOL! I'm laughing so hard, dude! Enna requested this to me (kinda.. she mentioned it in her latest e-mail!) and I'm really liking it so far! Uber-funny!
Update when you guys can! TTYL! =D
6/20/2004 c2 Sir Keilah
Wow, they're quite the lively group at lunch time, aren't they? Interested as to who leonard is. I really like how you are developing these characters and making them into people. I look forward to reading more.
-Keilah
Wow, they're quite the lively group at lunch time, aren't they? Interested as to who leonard is. I really like how you are developing these characters and making them into people. I look forward to reading more.
-Keilah
6/19/2004 c2 vanburen
poor terrence! why *does* his life have to suck? lots of yummy angst here! good job, update soon.
poor terrence! why *does* his life have to suck? lots of yummy angst here! good job, update soon.
6/17/2004 c2 9Magentian
^^ Heheh. Who needs a story? This is entertaining enough just reading the author's notes.
Ahem. To business.
I have to say, the Leonard bit really, really freaked me out. "It _speaks_ to us! *cowers & spasms*"
9Magentian^^ Heheh. Who needs a story? This is entertaining enough just reading the author's notes.
Ahem. To business.
I have to say, the Leonard bit really, really freaked me out. "It _speaks_ to us! *cowers & spasms*"
6/17/2004 c1 Magentian
Oh, no! Poor Terrence! He takes everything seriously? I feel so sorry for him...
^^ Yeah, this is me, LuvLuvG, devoted representative of the local Lagrimas coven, hehe. Enna said to check this out, so hence I came. ^^ It's very interesting... Terrence is so much more depthful than he appears. Yet it also scares me. Reminds me of this goofy lesbian mafia-boss at my school who's a manic depressive. Bad, bad memories.
Hoping someone can teach him to lighten up. ^^ Anywho... very neat. I like the way that the writing style almost matches Lagrimas'... *grins while looking at the author's note* though Enna would have it that she knows why, it seems. :D Onward to chapter 2!
Oh, no! Poor Terrence! He takes everything seriously? I feel so sorry for him...
^^ Yeah, this is me, LuvLuvG, devoted representative of the local Lagrimas coven, hehe. Enna said to check this out, so hence I came. ^^ It's very interesting... Terrence is so much more depthful than he appears. Yet it also scares me. Reminds me of this goofy lesbian mafia-boss at my school who's a manic depressive. Bad, bad memories.
Hoping someone can teach him to lighten up. ^^ Anywho... very neat. I like the way that the writing style almost matches Lagrimas'... *grins while looking at the author's note* though Enna would have it that she knows why, it seems. :D Onward to chapter 2!
6/16/2004 c2 1PhoenixoftheAshes
Wow! You two, this story is comming along great! You've really brought the humor out amoungst the characters, I'm even starting to get attached to a few.. *smiles and blushes* mwahaha, you shall never know who tho.. 'Tis a mystery.
1PhoenixoftheAshesWow! You two, this story is comming along great! You've really brought the humor out amoungst the characters, I'm even starting to get attached to a few.. *smiles and blushes* mwahaha, you shall never know who tho.. 'Tis a mystery.
6/16/2004 c2 Black Locket
Hehe quark.
TRhis chapter was even better than the last one. I like seeing ito Terrence's head. It makjes me feel powerful. But Leonard scares me. How come noone noticed him talking to Terrence? Hurry and update! And And Life Goes On too. And Lagrimas! Tell Enna to upsdate Lagrimas.
Hehe quark.
TRhis chapter was even better than the last one. I like seeing ito Terrence's head. It makjes me feel powerful. But Leonard scares me. How come noone noticed him talking to Terrence? Hurry and update! And And Life Goes On too. And Lagrimas! Tell Enna to upsdate Lagrimas.
6/15/2004 c2 3weepingsilver
*glances around insidiously*
QUARK! Quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark...
The ghost of profile hackingness has returned, this time with an arsenal of quarks.
I shall now indulge in an evil laugh.
MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Now! To the Bat-Fax, Robin! *scampers off*
3weepingsilver*glances around insidiously*
QUARK! Quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark quark...
The ghost of profile hackingness has returned, this time with an arsenal of quarks.
I shall now indulge in an evil laugh.
MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Now! To the Bat-Fax, Robin! *scampers off*
6/14/2004 c1 3Lexandria
As promised, my review!
ok.. first of, I agree with Enna in her oppinion of Terrence, I, personally, like Toushin, and Caleb, and everyone better then him.. good, well-develpted character though! I kinda think he's selfish and shalow and doesn't realise how lucky he is to have a boyfriend who loves him! ( ask Enna about my oppinion of my ex, if you don't know... might explain a fiew things about my oppinion ^_^ )
very nicely written! did I say that allready?
Seriously, though, though Terrence is unlikeable, in my own oppinion, he is very well thought out. psycologically, he makes sence, nothing is out of line in that respect.. uh.. by that I mean everything makes sence, his reactions to things and stuff... not like some things I read where, psycologically, they are way under-developed.. they have one mood all the time and no reason for it, and no reason for their actions eather. my complements on the wonderful character development (( ah-ha! that's the word I was looking for... ))
um...-blinks- my brain stoped...
OH! didja see the pics I did of Lagrimas characters?
( semi-shameless self promotion, even though no link is presented )
and.. isn't this a nice, long comment?
3LexandriaAs promised, my review!
ok.. first of, I agree with Enna in her oppinion of Terrence, I, personally, like Toushin, and Caleb, and everyone better then him.. good, well-develpted character though! I kinda think he's selfish and shalow and doesn't realise how lucky he is to have a boyfriend who loves him! ( ask Enna about my oppinion of my ex, if you don't know... might explain a fiew things about my oppinion ^_^ )
very nicely written! did I say that allready?
Seriously, though, though Terrence is unlikeable, in my own oppinion, he is very well thought out. psycologically, he makes sence, nothing is out of line in that respect.. uh.. by that I mean everything makes sence, his reactions to things and stuff... not like some things I read where, psycologically, they are way under-developed.. they have one mood all the time and no reason for it, and no reason for their actions eather. my complements on the wonderful character development (( ah-ha! that's the word I was looking for... ))
um...-blinks- my brain stoped...
OH! didja see the pics I did of Lagrimas characters?
( semi-shameless self promotion, even though no link is presented )
and.. isn't this a nice, long comment?
6/13/2004 c1 Sir Keilah
Wow, I went to go read this and it's awesome. I am really looking to reading more of this. I think the concept for this story is really awesome, and it is nice to see more of a character who is just an extra in lagrimas.
-Keilah
Wow, I went to go read this and it's awesome. I am really looking to reading more of this. I think the concept for this story is really awesome, and it is nice to see more of a character who is just an extra in lagrimas.
-Keilah
6/12/2004 c1 3weepingsilver
TERRYIFOUNDATYPO!... So I fixed it and then decided to review. As you. Because that's fun!
Uh.. I mean.. erm.. *booming voice* I AM THE GHOST OF PROFILE HACKINGNESS! I HAVE DISCOVERED YOUR PASSWORD AND YOUR E-MAIL AND LOGGED IN AS YOU AND LEFT THIS REVIEW! I ALSO ENJOY USING RUN-ON SENTENCES! LIKE ZIPPY! THIS IS THE GHOST OF PROFILE HACKINGNESS! AND REDUNDANCY! OKAY! SIGNING OFF!
3weepingsilverTERRYIFOUNDATYPO!... So I fixed it and then decided to review. As you. Because that's fun!
Uh.. I mean.. erm.. *booming voice* I AM THE GHOST OF PROFILE HACKINGNESS! I HAVE DISCOVERED YOUR PASSWORD AND YOUR E-MAIL AND LOGGED IN AS YOU AND LEFT THIS REVIEW! I ALSO ENJOY USING RUN-ON SENTENCES! LIKE ZIPPY! THIS IS THE GHOST OF PROFILE HACKINGNESS! AND REDUNDANCY! OKAY! SIGNING OFF!