
6/17/2004 c1
46inquistrix
i love the first stanza. the imagery rocks like nothing else...but the 2nd is a bit odd. try "death in my sight/death in my ears/death in my lungs" (breath sounds a little weird)what sayest thou, friend?
me

i love the first stanza. the imagery rocks like nothing else...but the 2nd is a bit odd. try "death in my sight/death in my ears/death in my lungs" (breath sounds a little weird)what sayest thou, friend?
me
6/13/2004 c1
13hauntingtheliving
wow o_O;; thats awesome..disturbing but good..reminds me of the dead cat that was under the trailer next door for almost two weeks..*shudders*
either way, good poem, i wanna read more..

wow o_O;; thats awesome..disturbing but good..reminds me of the dead cat that was under the trailer next door for almost two weeks..*shudders*
either way, good poem, i wanna read more..
6/10/2004 c1
467xoxkissxofxdeathxox
this is good. i like the description, powerful words. keep writing!

this is good. i like the description, powerful words. keep writing!
6/4/2004 c1 simpleplan13
well the beginning part is definately... well described
I liek the end though!
well the beginning part is definately... well described
I liek the end though!